Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given pie charts compares the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients which are sodium, saturated fat,and added sugar. Consumed by the Americans.

Overall, it clearly seen that USA citizens consumed big part of nutrients in dinner. whereas, brekfast was the lowest consumed nutrients.

Acoording to the pie chart dinner consumed a large part of sodium and saturated fat which is 43% and 37% in added it's consumed 23%. Whereas, in breakfast it's consumed small amount of sodium (14%) and saturated fat (21%) but there are big difference between there which is Highest in added sugar about 42%.

Looking at the next in breakfast they consumed 14% of sodium and 16% of saturated fat and added sugar. Whereas 29% sodium,26% saturated fat and 19% added sugar consumed by the Americans.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the three nutrients and report several relevant figures, including dinner’s 43% share of sodium and 37% of saturated fat, and the 42% figure for added sugar in snacks. However, the overview is inaccurate: dinner is not the largest meal for all three nutrients, since snacks have the highest added-sugar share. You also describe breakfast as having 21% saturated fat, although the chart shows 16%; 21% is the snacks figure. Lunch is only partly reported, and snacks are otherwise omitted. The response is also 24 words below the 150-word minimum, with eight copied prompt words excluded from the count. These omissions and misreadings leave the task only minimally covered.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, beginning with an introduction and an overall statement before giving figures. The use of “Overall,” “whereas,” and “Looking at” also signals some relationships between points. However, the progression is difficult to follow: the second paragraph discusses dinner and breakfast, while the final paragraph returns to breakfast before mentioning lunch. Snacks, an important category, are not given a clear place in the account. Some linking is repetitive or confusing, particularly the repeated “Whereas” and the unclear reference in “Looking at the next.” Group the information by the main patterns—for example, dinner’s high sodium and fat versus snacks’ high sugar—and use clear comparisons within each paragraph.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “average percentage,” “nutrients,” “large part,” and “small amount,” so the reader can generally understand the topic and comparisons. However, the range is limited and several phrases are imprecise or awkward, such as “consumed big part of nutrients” and “in added it’s consumed 23%.” Repetition of “consumed” also makes the description less natural. There are noticeable spelling errors, including “brekfast” and “Acoording,” and the phrase “there are big difference” does not express the comparison clearly. Aim for precise reporting language such as “accounted for,” “proportion,” and “highest share,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some sentence variety, including a relative clause in the opening and contrast clauses introduced by “whereas.” However, the range remains limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make several sentences awkward or unclear. For example, “The given pie charts compares” has subject–verb disagreement, while “Overall, it clearly seen” is missing an auxiliary verb. Sentence fragments and punctuation problems also appear in “Consumed by the Americans” and “whereas, brekfast…”. In “there are big difference between there,” the sentence structure and reference are faulty. Practise complete sentences with accurate subjects and verbs, and use punctuation to separate the introduction, overview, and comparisons.

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