Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The charts compare the different proportion of unhealthy meals of three kinds of nutrients if eaten a lot.
Overall, sodium, saturated fat and added sugar are the maximum containing in dinner, and minimum in others involv
Sodium 43% intake during dinner, and 37 percent saturated fate as compare to sugar, is 23%. In snacks, sugar is highest percent 42 as compare to sodium and saturated fat, is respectively 14% and 21 percent. In lunch, 29 sodium and 26 % fat as compare to 19 % sugar.
In breakfast, almost near to each other percentage 14% sodium, and 16 percent similar amount of saturated fat and added sugar. During lunch, 29 proportion of sodium intake, and 26 percent of saturated fat eaten in meal, and third one added sugar eaten 19 percent.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop the response. While you have identified some key features, the analysis is fragmented and lacks a clear, cohesive summary. The overview provided is somewhat confusing, and the data reporting is repetitive and lacks the necessary synthesis required for a high band score. To improve, ensure you group data logically rather than listing figures meal by meal, and provide a more comprehensive comparison of the trends across all four categories. The under-length penalty is applied here as the response is 19 words short.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay lacks a clear logical progression. The paragraphing is disjointed, and the transition between the different meals is abrupt. You rely heavily on simple lists of percentages rather than using cohesive devices to link ideas or compare the nutrients effectively. For example, phrases like 'in breakfast' and 'during lunch' are used, but the internal structure of these paragraphs is repetitive and lacks flow. To improve, use linking words such as 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'similarly' to connect your observations and ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'percentage', 'amount', and 'eaten'. There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'maximum containing' instead of 'highest concentration' and 'saturated fate' (a spelling error). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'intake', 'constitute', and 'account for', and ensure you check your spelling carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The grammar is frequently inaccurate, which often impedes the clarity of the information. There are many sentence fragments and missing verbs, such as '29 sodium and 26 % fat as compare to 19 % sugar', which lacks a main verb. Additionally, there are issues with subject-verb agreement and preposition usage. The sentence structures are predominantly simple, with very few attempts at complex sentences. To improve, focus on constructing complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, and practice using complex structures like relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions to add variety to your writing.
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