Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The charts illustrates the average proportion of three types of nutrients in food which may be not good for body if eaten too much.
Overall, it is clear that added sugar is totally different from other two in case nutrients, but Sodium and Saturated fat are somehow similar in that case, these have only few difference.
Saturated fat highly consumed by dinner specially about 37%. However, lunch also took 26% fats which are also unhealthy. Snacks also absorbed 21% while breakfast consumed 16%. Furthermore, in Dinner, sodium was present at peak level which is up to 43% while lunch is 29%. But, breakfast and snacks are at same ratio 14%. In last, Added sugar represents that it is present in specially snacks which is 42% and it is sharply at high level. Dinner has about 23% while lunch has 19% whereas breakfast has lowest percentage which is about 16%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you have identified the main features of the charts and made relevant comparisons, the analysis is somewhat mechanical. You successfully highlighted the peak values for each nutrient, such as saturated fat in dinner (37%) and added sugar in snacks (42%). However, the overview is slightly underdeveloped and lacks a more sophisticated synthesis of the data. To improve, ensure you provide a more comprehensive summary that captures the broader trends rather than just listing percentages, and ensure you meet the minimum length requirement to avoid a penalty.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into three paragraphs, which is a logical structure for a report. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat repetitive and basic. Phrases like 'Furthermore' and 'In last' are used to connect ideas, but the flow between sentences feels a bit disjointed. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the second sentence where 'in that case' is used vaguely. To improve, try to vary your linking words and ensure that each sentence flows naturally into the next by using more sophisticated transition signals and better pronoun referencing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely on simple verbs like 'consumed', 'took', and 'represents'. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'sharply at high level' and 'in case nutrients'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends and data points. For example, instead of saying 'consumed', you could use 'accounted for' or 'constituted'. Additionally, focus on using more precise adjectives and adverbs to describe the data, such as 'predominant', 'significant', or 'proportionately'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
There are several grammatical errors throughout the text that affect the clarity of your writing. For instance, 'The charts illustrates' (subject-verb agreement error), 'not good for body' (missing article), and 'these have only few difference' (incorrect phrasing). You rely mostly on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences are often marred by errors. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, the correct use of articles, and pluralization. Practicing the construction of complex sentences using subordinating conjunctions will also help you demonstrate a wider grammatical range.
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