Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The provided charts below illustrate the average ratio in typical meals of three types of nutrients such as sodium,saturated fat and added sugar,all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Average percentage of sodium,saturated fats and added sugar in typical meals consumed in the USA,At the First stage, Sodium 43 rate breakfast after that 29 proportion lunch then 14 portion dinner of sodium and lastly 14 rate snacks of sodium.

At the Second stage, 16 percentage morning meal of saturated fat after that 26 ratio lunch of fat then second last 37 rate evening meal and last 21 proportion of saturated fat in the USA.

At the Final stage, moderate ratio of three typical meals consumed in the america,first 16 percentage first meal of added sugar after that midday meal 19 rate of cane sugar then 23 portion main meal of corn syrup and lastly 42 share snacks of agave nectar.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to summarize the charts, but it fails to provide a clear overview or highlight significant trends. The information is presented as a list of data points rather than a cohesive report. For example, the description of sodium levels is fragmented and lacks comparative analysis. Furthermore, the response introduces external information not present in the charts, such as 'cane sugar', 'corn syrup', and 'agave nectar', which misrepresents the data provided. The lack of a clear summary of the main features and the inclusion of inaccurate details significantly hinder the task achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks logical organization and progression. While there is an attempt to group information by 'stages', the paragraphs are poorly structured and do not flow logically. The use of cohesive devices is repetitive and mechanical, such as the constant use of 'after that' and 'lastly'. There is no clear paragraphing strategy, and the transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt. The referencing is also unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of the three nutrients across the different meal types.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student frequently uses the word 'rate' or 'proportion' incorrectly to describe percentages. There is a lack of variety in reporting verbs or comparative language. Additionally, the student uses inaccurate terminology, such as 'cane sugar' and 'agave nectar', which are not supported by the prompt. The phrasing is often unnatural, such as '14 rate snacks of sodium', which impedes clarity. To improve, the student needs to focus on using precise mathematical vocabulary and avoiding the invention of data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, fragmented sentences. There are frequent errors in sentence structure, punctuation, and word order. For instance, 'Sodium 43 rate breakfast after that 29 proportion lunch' lacks a verb and proper syntax. The misuse of commas and the lack of capital letters in some places further detract from the quality of the writing. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures, and the frequent grammatical errors make the text difficult to read and understand.

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