Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The given chart shows the availability of three types of nutrients across four diffrent typical meals in USA.
Overall, breakfast has loaded with high percentage of of sodium and staurated fat while 42% of added sugar intake is from the snacks consumed. Lunch is considered as another culprit for catering unhealthy nutrients as it provides 29% of sodium , 26% of saturated fat and 19% of added sugar.
The sodium intake of dinner meal is comparatively mimumum, although it accounts 14%
The given chart shows the availability of three types of nutrients across four diffrent typical meals in USA.
Overall, breakfast has loaded with high percentage of of sodium and staurated fat while 42% of added sugar intake is from the snacks consumed. Lunch is considered as another culprit for catering unhealthy nutrients as it provides 29% of sodium , 26% of saturated fat and 19% of added sugar.
The sodium intake of dinner meal is comparatively mimumum, although it accounts 14%
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to address the task adequately. You have only covered breakfast, lunch, and a partial mention of dinner, completely omitting the 'snacks' category for sodium and saturated fat, as well as the 'dinner' data for added sugar and saturated fat. Furthermore, the text repeats the same information twice, which suggests a lack of planning and failure to present a complete overview. To improve, you must ensure all data categories are represented and compared, and avoid redundant repetition. The summary is incomplete and does not provide a clear, comprehensive report of the main features shown in the charts.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text suffers from significant issues with coherence and cohesion. The most glaring problem is the repetition of the entire first paragraph, which disrupts the flow and makes the response difficult to follow. There is no logical progression of ideas, and the paragraphing is non-existent due to the duplication. While there are some attempts at cohesive devices like 'Overall' and 'while', they are undermined by the structural failure of the text. To improve, you should organize your data into distinct paragraphs (e.g., an overview, followed by two body paragraphs) and ensure that no information is repeated.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and contains several errors. You use 'diffrent' (spelling error), 'loaded with' (informal), and 'culprit for catering' (inaccurate collocation). The range of vocabulary is narrow, relying on basic terms to describe the data. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise academic vocabulary to describe trends and proportions, such as 'constitutes', 'accounts for', or 'a significant proportion'. Additionally, ensure you proofread for basic spelling mistakes like 'staurated' and 'mimumum'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the clarity of the message. Examples include 'breakfast has loaded with' (incorrect passive/active voice usage), 'diffrent typical meals in USA' (missing article 'the'), and 'sodium intake of dinner meal is comparatively mimumum' (incorrect word choice and missing article). The sentence structures are simple, and the repetition of the text makes it difficult to assess your ability to use complex structures effectively. Focus on subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and ensuring your sentences are grammatically complete.
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