Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie charts depict the information about the maximum proportion in meals which are consumed by individuals who are live in USA, these are three distinct types and all of them are not good for health if eat why people too much.
Overall ,it is evident that the percentage of two ingredients are almost similar in one category.
To begin with, the percentage of sodium ,saturated fats and sugar is almost same in breakfast approximately 16%. The proportion of ingredients are highest in dinner 43% sodium, 37% saturated fat and 23% sugar. In contrast, the lowest percentage of sodium in snacks but the sugar touch peak point around 42% followed by 21% saturated fats.
Moving towards rest of the information, the ratio in lunch meal 29%, 26%, and 19% in sodium ,saturated fat and sugar, which are consumed in USA respectively. However, the ratio of sodium is remain intact in two different categories snacks and breakfast around 14%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the task by identifying the main features of the charts. However, the analysis is somewhat inconsistent. While you successfully highlight the dinner meal as having the highest proportions, the description of the data is occasionally confusing, particularly when comparing the snacks and breakfast categories. The overview is quite weak; it merely states that percentages are 'similar' without capturing the significant trends or the most striking differences between the nutrients across the four meals. To improve, ensure that your overview highlights the most significant overall patterns, such as which nutrient is most prevalent overall or which meal has the most extreme values.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the logical progression between sentences is often disjointed. For instance, the transition 'Moving towards rest of the information' is a bit mechanical. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate, such as the phrase 'which are consumed in USA respectively' at the end of a sentence, which lacks a clear antecedent. Improving the flow between sentences by using more varied linking words and ensuring that referencing (e.g., 'these', 'those') is clear would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for higher bands. You rely on basic descriptors like 'highest', 'lowest', and 'similar'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'sugar touch peak point' and 'ratio is remain intact'. These errors occasionally make the text feel unnatural. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'predominant', 'fluctuate', or 'account for', and ensure that your word forms are used correctly in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'individuals who are live in USA' (should be 'who live in the USA'), 'all of them are not good for health if eat why people too much' (which is syntactically broken), and 'the ratio of sodium is remain intact'. These errors in subject-verb agreement and sentence construction are noticeable. Focusing on basic sentence accuracy and proofreading for verb forms will help improve your score in this area.
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