Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The table and pie charts illustrate the total numbers of visitors and their satisfaction level regarding Ashdown Museum before and after refurbishment.
Overall, the refurbishment led to a significant increase in visitor numbers and a notable improvement in satisfaction.
In the table, it showed that visitors before refurbishment were fewer compared to after it. Before refurbishment, the dissatisfied remain at first with 40% and satisfied with 30%, respectively, but are very dissatisfied with the low margin of 10%. As very satisfied and no response with less share of 15% and 5%, respectively. The most important point is the number of visitors increased from 74 thousand to 92 thousand.
On the other hand, the year after refurbishment shows a different scenario where satisfied leads from the front are 40%, and the number of very satisfied gives a surge from 15 to 35%. Dissatisfied visitors decline from 40 to 15% and move from second to third spot. Very dissatisfied visitors decline steadily from 10 to 5%, but no response visitors remain static and stay at 5%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
You have failed to address the task instructions. The prompt provided charts regarding the average percentages of three types of nutrients in meals, yet your response describes a table and pie charts about museum visitor numbers and satisfaction levels. This is a significant error, as you are writing about the wrong data entirely. While you have attempted to summarize features and make comparisons, the content is irrelevant to the provided visual information. To improve, ensure you carefully analyze the specific data provided in the prompt before beginning your writing. You must report on the actual figures shown in the charts rather than inventing or substituting data from a different task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a clear attempt at a summary. You use some cohesive devices such as 'On the other hand' and 'Overall' to link ideas. However, because the content is entirely unrelated to the prompt, the logical progression is undermined by the fact that the information being organized is incorrect. Within the paragraphs, the flow is generally easy to follow, but the referencing is sometimes confusing, such as in the second paragraph where the description of percentages is disjointed and difficult to interpret due to awkward phrasing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to discuss data, using terms like 'significant increase', 'notable improvement', 'surge', and 'decline'. However, there are instances of awkward word choice and collocation, such as 'satisfied leads from the front' and 'very dissatisfied with the low margin of 10%'. These phrases sound unnatural in an academic report. While your vocabulary is adequate for describing trends, the lack of precision in reporting the actual data (which is missing) limits your ability to demonstrate higher-level lexical control. Focus on using more formal, objective language suitable for data analysis.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'Before refurbishment, the dissatisfied remain at first with 40%...'. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, including tense inconsistencies ('In the table, it showed...') and awkward sentence construction ('As very satisfied and no response with less share of 15% and 5%, respectively'). Punctuation is generally functional, but some sentences are clunky and lack grammatical precision. To reach a higher band, you should aim for more error-free sentences and ensure that your verb tenses are consistent when describing data trends.
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