Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The table and pie charts illustrate the total numbers of visitors and their satisfaction level regarding Ashdown Museum before and after refurbishment.
Overall, the refurbishment led to a substanial increase in visitor numbers and a notable improvement in satisfaction.
In the table, it shows that visitors before refurbishment were fewer compared to after it. Before refurbishment, the dissatisfied group remained at first with 40% and satisfied with 30%, respectively, but there was very dissatisfied with the low margin of 10%. As very satisfied and no response had 15% and 5%, respectively. The most important point is the number of visitors increased from 74 thousand to 92 thousand.
On the other hand, the year after refurbishment showed a different scenario where satisfied category remained at top with 40%, and the number of very satisfied increased from 15 to 35%. Dissatisfied visitors declined from 40 to 15% and moved from second to third spot. Very dissatisfied visitors declined steadily from 10 to 5%, but no response visitors remained static and stay at 5%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 2.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 2.0
You have failed to address the task prompt entirely. The instructions explicitly ask you to describe charts regarding the 'average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients', yet your response describes a museum refurbishment. This is a 'memorised' or 'off-topic' response. While you have selected and reported features from the data you chose to describe, the content is irrelevant to the provided image. Consequently, the response cannot be assessed as a successful completion of the task. To improve, you must carefully read the specific data provided in the exam and ensure your summary directly reflects the information in the charts.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organised into logical paragraphs with an introduction and body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In the table', 'On the other hand', and 'Overall'. However, because the content is entirely unrelated to the prompt, the logical progression is undermined by the fact that the information being presented does not match the visual data provided. Within the context of the text you wrote, the flow is acceptable, but the lack of relevance to the actual task prevents a higher score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your ideas, such as 'substanial' (spelled incorrectly as 'substanial'), 'refurbishment', 'scenario', and 'static'. There are some spelling errors and minor collocation issues, such as 'remained at first' or 'no response visitors'. While the vocabulary is adequate for describing trends, it is being used to describe the wrong data set. You should focus on using more precise academic vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained constant'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'In the table, it shows that...' (redundant subject) and 'very dissatisfied with the low margin of 10%' (awkward phrasing). You also have issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage, for example, 'remained at top' instead of 'remained at the top'. While your meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors indicates a limited control over complex structures. Focus on proofreading for basic errors in articles and prepositions.
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