Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart below shows a compares between sodium, saturated fat, Added sugar taken throughout the day Breakfast,lunch,dinner and snacks
if we see taking of sodium is much more taken during the dinner followed by lunch where people eat less sodium in comparison to dinner and equal percent for the snacks and breakfast.
While if we see the total percentage of saturated fats consumed in all meals , we can clearly see the highest amount of fat eaten is for dinner 37%followed by lunch at 26% and the lowest eaten fat is for the breakfast.
If we see the main and most dangerous category Sugar , its higly taken in Snacks followed by dinner and lowest in breakfast.
If we want to conclude this passage in a para we can say people ten to eat the healthiest in the breakfast , their dinner is mostly filled with sodium and fat and the most dangerously the snacks they eat consist of sugar in a very large amount ,which is dangerous .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, identifying key trends for sodium, saturated fat, and added sugar across the four meal categories. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you mention the highest and lowest points, you miss opportunities to make more sophisticated comparisons, such as noting the specific proportions or the contrast between the nutrients. The overview is integrated into the final paragraph rather than being presented as a clear summary at the beginning, which is a standard requirement for Task 1. To improve, ensure you provide a clear, concise overview of the main trends in the introduction and use more precise data points to support your descriptions.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by repetitive sentence structures and a lack of varied cohesive devices. Phrases like 'If we see' are used repeatedly, which makes the writing feel mechanical. There is a lack of linking words to connect ideas between sentences and paragraphs. For example, the transition between the discussion of sodium and saturated fat is abrupt. To improve, use a wider range of cohesive devices such as 'in contrast,' 'furthermore,' 'consequently,' or 'whereas' to create a smoother progression of ideas and better connect your observations.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety expected at higher bands. You rely on basic verbs like 'taken' and 'eaten' repeatedly. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'taking of sodium is much more taken' and 'highly taken in Snacks.' These errors occasionally make the text sound unnatural. To improve, focus on using more academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'consumed,' 'accounted for,' 'constitute,' or 'proportion,' and ensure you use words in their correct grammatical context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that affect clarity. Issues include missing articles ('the breakfast'), incorrect verb forms ('people ten to eat'), and awkward phrasing ('the most dangerously the snacks they eat'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some sentences lacking proper commas or capitalization. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focus on subject-verb agreement, consistent use of articles, and proofreading for basic sentence structure errors.
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