Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The give pir chart depicts the average percentages in typical meals of three different types of nutrients which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Overall, it can be seen that average proportion of sodium and saturated fat were the highest in dinner compared to other meals whereas added sugar was the least in breakfast meal.
In dinner meal was 43% sodium in meal followed by 29% in lunch meal where as breakfast and snacks remained the same proportion of sodium 14%. Unhealthy saturated fat was 35% in dinner which was the highest among this nutrient while the second more consumed lunch meal 26%. This nutrient showed snacks meal around 21% and 16% in breakfast which was the lowest among this figure.
The average proportion of added sugar was 42% in snacks meal which was more than other nutrients. The second more meal was dinner around 23% and 19% added sugar in lunch meal. Less sugar consumed in breakfast meals almost 16% among this figure.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features of the three nutrients across the four meal types. You successfully highlight the key trends, such as dinner having the highest sodium and saturated fat, and snacks being the primary source of added sugar. However, the report lacks a clear, analytical overview of the data, and some comparisons are slightly repetitive. To reach a higher band, ensure that the overview synthesizes the information rather than just listing figures. While the main features are selected, the presentation could be more concise to improve the flow of information.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive (e.g., 'The second more meal was...'). There are instances where the progression between sentences feels disjointed, particularly in the second paragraph where the transition between nutrient types is abrupt. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would enhance the overall flow. Referencing is generally clear, but the structure of the comparisons could be more sophisticated to improve the logical progression.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to describe the data clearly. You use terms like 'depicts', 'proportion', and 'consumed' appropriately. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'The second more meal' instead of 'The second most significant meal' or 'The second highest'. Additionally, there are minor spelling errors like 'pir chart' (pie chart). To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary to describe trends and comparisons, and ensure that your word choices are consistently accurate to avoid minor errors that slightly distract the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. For example, 'In dinner meal was 43% sodium' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'Dinner accounted for 43% of sodium'. There are also issues with article usage and prepositional phrases (e.g., 'remained the same proportion of sodium 14%'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the data, they are frequent enough to limit the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and sentence construction will help improve your accuracy.
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