Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The charts illustrate the average proportion in breakfast, dinner, lunch and snacks of three types of nutrients (sodium, saturated fats, added sugar) all of which may be detrimental if consumed excess.

Overall, it is evident that sodium and saturated fats are consumed very much in dinner compared to lunch, breakfast and snacks. Furthermore, sugar showed more consumed by another period of eat in snacks.

On the one hand, the percentage of sodium are consumed in Breakfast, accounted for 14%, followed by dinner, lunch and snacks, at 43%, 29 and 14% respectively.

On the other hand, the consumption of saturated fats and added sugar showed similar trend in breakfast was responsible for 16%. Moreover, the number of saturated fat and sugar which was consumed in snack

illustrate the double proportion from 21% to 42%. Moreover, saturated fat consumed in lunch at 26%, and sugar consumed in lunch at 19%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you have identified the main features of the charts, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a cohesive summary of the data. You have correctly highlighted the high sodium and saturated fat levels in dinner, but the description of the data is occasionally confusing, such as the statement regarding 'double proportion' for snacks. To improve, ensure you provide a more comprehensive overview and double-check that all data points are clearly and accurately reported to meet the length requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed. The use of cohesive devices like 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' is slightly forced and does not always fit the context of the data being presented. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparisons between the three nutrients. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear focus will help improve the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and variety expected at higher bands. You rely on repetitive phrasing, such as 'consumed' and 'proportion'. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'period of eat' and 'consumed very much'. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more varied synonyms for 'consumption' (e.g., 'intake', 'ingestion') and use more precise descriptors for the data trends (e.g., 'constitutes', 'represents', 'peaks at'). Expanding your range of academic vocabulary will significantly enhance your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. For example, 'the percentage of sodium are consumed' (subject-verb agreement error) and 'if consumed excess' (missing preposition 'in'). There are also issues with punctuation and sentence construction, such as the fragmented sentence structure in the final paragraph. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions. Proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy will help ensure that your meaning is conveyed more effectively.

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