Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given pie chart shows the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much:
The first category is sodium symbolised as Na In breakfast citizens consume 14% of sodium whereas people consume 14% of sodium in snacks whereas 29% of sodium is intaken by indiviuals during the lunch whereas 43% of sodium is consumed during dinner .
The second category is saturated fat in breakfast 16% of saturated fat is consumed whereas 26% of saturated fat is consumed in lunch whereas 37% of saturated fat in consumed in dinner other than this 21% of saturated fat is consumed in snacks.
The third category is added sugar, during breakfast 16% of added sugar is consumed whereas in lunch 19% of added sugar is consumed meanwhile in dinner 23% of sugar is consumed whereas 42% the highest quantity of sugar is consumed in snacks in the form of chocolates
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers all three nutrients and their distribution across meals. However, it lacks a clear overview, which is a requirement for a high band score in Task 1. The report is essentially a list of data points rather than a summary of main features and trends. While you have identified the highest values, such as sodium in dinner and sugar in snacks, the lack of an introductory summary or a concluding synthesis means the information is not fully developed or organised to highlight the most significant comparisons. To improve, you should group the data more effectively and provide a clear overview of the main trends observed across the charts.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organised into three paragraphs, one for each nutrient. However, the internal structure of these paragraphs is repetitive and mechanical. You rely heavily on the word 'whereas' to connect clauses, which makes the flow monotonous and lacks variety. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas between sentences effectively. Furthermore, the punctuation is poor, with many run-on sentences and a lack of commas to separate clauses, which makes the text difficult to read. Improving the use of transition words and varying your sentence structure would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You use the phrase 'is consumed' repeatedly throughout the text, which is monotonous. There is also an issue with word choice, such as 'intaken' (which is not standard English) and 'symbolised as Na'. The mention of 'chocolates' is an external addition not supported by the provided charts, which is a significant error in data interpretation. To achieve a higher band, you should use a wider range of synonyms for 'consumed' (e.g., 'ingested', 'accounted for', 'made up') and ensure that your vocabulary is strictly based on the information provided in the prompt.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, repetitive sentence structures. There are frequent errors in punctuation, particularly the lack of full stops and the misuse of commas, which leads to run-on sentences. For example, 'In breakfast citizens consume 14% of sodium whereas people consume 14% of sodium in snacks whereas 29% of sodium is intaken...' is grammatically awkward and lacks proper sentence boundaries. You should focus on using a variety of sentence types, including complex sentences with appropriate subordinating conjunctions, and pay closer attention to basic punctuation rules to improve the clarity and accuracy of your writing.
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