Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
This pie chart illustrates average percentage in typical foods of three type of nutrient, some of them may be unhealthy if eaten too much. At a glance, at the time of dinner, USA consumed highest amount of sodium, saturated fat and added sugar.
Overall, sodium, saturated fat and added sugar were consumed highest in dinner, while taken lowest amount in breakfast.
In detail, consumption of sodium is nearly half proportion in dinner, while Saturated fat were more taken in dinner. Snakes contains 42% of added sugar, saturated fat nearly one-fifth part and sodium proportion were 14%. In lunch, there was only 3 % of difference in consumption of sodium and saturated fat, while added sugar were accounts for 19%. According to breakfast data, saturated fat constitute 16%, sodium occupy 14% of space and added sugar's proportion accounted for 16%.
Snacks having better proportion of added sugar with compare to another time of lunch.The amount of Sodium, saturated fat and added sugar is nearly remained same in all the time.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, identifying key trends such as the high consumption of nutrients at dinner. However, the analysis is inconsistent and contains factual inaccuracies. For instance, you state that sodium consumption is 'nearly half' at dinner, which is not supported by the data provided. Additionally, the statement that the amount of nutrients 'remained same in all the time' contradicts the visual evidence of the charts. While you attempt to report data, the lack of precision and the inclusion of incorrect information prevent a clear overview. To improve, ensure that your data points are accurate and that your comparisons are logically derived from the charts provided.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'In detail' and 'According to breakfast data' are used, but the logical flow between sentences is frequently disrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear referencing. For example, the final paragraph is confusing, as it contradicts earlier points and lacks a clear connection to the preceding information. Improving the use of transition signals and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. You use basic terms like 'taken', 'space', and 'part', which are not always appropriate for describing statistical data. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'Snakes' (likely meant 'Snacks') and 'better proportion', which sound unnatural. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'constitute', 'account for', and 'fluctuate', while ensuring they are used in the correct context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Saturated fat were', 'added sugar were accounts'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'with compare to another time'). While the meaning is generally understandable, these recurring errors demonstrate a lack of control over complex structures. Focusing on basic grammatical accuracy, particularly subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage, will help improve your score in this criterion.
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