Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The three bar charts illustrate the average proportion in standard meals of three types of nutrients in United States and if we consumed it soo much than it may be most dangerous for our body.
Overall, In terms of dinner meal, all three nutrients have high percentage in it as opposed to other meals. The percentage of all nutrients is low in the breakfast meal.
In terms of lunch, the percentage of sodium is 29%, which is higher than other nutrients while the percentage of Saturated fat is 26% and the percentage of added sugar is 19%, which is low. In the snacks, the proportion of sodium is 14% which is lower than others while saturated fat is 21% and added sugar is 42% which is higher than others.
Regarding to Breakfast, sodium is 14% which is lower than others while the percentage of both saturated fat and added sugar is 16%, respectively. With regards to Dinner, the percentage of sodium is much more higher than other nutrients which is 43% while the saturated fat is 37% and the proportion of added sugar is 23% which is lower in dinner meal.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features of the charts. You have successfully selected and reported the key data points for each meal type and nutrient. However, the overview is slightly weak; while you mention that dinner has high percentages, it would be more effective to highlight the most significant trend, such as the dominance of added sugar in snacks versus sodium in dinner. The introductory sentence is a bit informal and contains some irrelevant commentary about health risks, which is not required for an Academic Task 1 report. To improve, focus strictly on describing the data presented in the charts.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is logically organized with a clear progression from an overview to specific meal categories. You use paragraphing to separate the different meal types, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive (e.g., 'In terms of...', 'Regarding to...'). There are also some minor issues with referencing and flow, such as the slightly awkward transition between the overview and the body paragraphs. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would elevate the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'nutrients', and 'illustrate' correctly. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'much more higher' (a double comparative error) and 'consumed it soo much'. The phrasing 'in United States' is also missing an article. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensuring that your collocations are natural. Avoid informal phrasing and ensure that your comparative structures are grammatically sound.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include 'average proportion in standard meals... in United States', 'if we consumed it soo much than it may be most dangerous', and 'Regarding to Breakfast'. The use of 'respectively' is also misused in the context of the breakfast data. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on subject-verb agreement, correct preposition usage, and avoiding redundant comparative forms.
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