Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chats illustrate the proportion of four types meals consumed in diffrent catagories of nutrients in USA which has inclueded sodium, satuated fat and added sugar. These all are can be highly affected for health if eaten too much.
Overall, it is clear that most consumed nutrients eat at dinner , but at breakfast it consumed less than other meals.
Firstly, commoners are consuming most sodium at dinner and lunch time which rate is 43% and 29% gradually, it is the most consumed rate all over the nutrients include all meals. However, snacks and breakfast consume rate is same only 14%.
Secondly, regarding for Saturated fat at breakfast takes only 16% but lunch and snacks are consumed nutients in meal slightly upper than breakfast the rate is 26% and 21% rapidly. Moreover, it is showing at dinner people eat 37% of saturated fat which is the highest percentage above these meals.
Moreover, added sugar consumed most at snacks 42% which is the highest rate all over the nutriants. On the other hand, at breakfast, lunch and dinner these meals consumed added sugar sequentially, the rate is 16%,19% and 23% gradually.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts and makes relevant comparisons. You have identified the highest and lowest consumption points for each nutrient. However, the overview is somewhat weak; it mentions that most nutrients are consumed at dinner, but it fails to highlight the distinct contrast between the nutrients (e.g., sugar peaking at snacks versus sodium/fat peaking at dinner). The data reporting is generally accurate, though the use of terms like 'gradually' and 'rapidly' to describe data points is incorrect, as these words describe trends over time, not static percentages. To improve, ensure your overview captures the most significant differences between the three categories.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each focusing on a specific nutrient. You use transition words like 'Firstly,' 'Secondly,' and 'Moreover' to guide the reader. However, the cohesion is sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear. For example, the phrase 'these meals consumed added sugar sequentially' is confusing because the data does not show a sequence or progression. Additionally, the connection between sentences could be smoother; some sentences feel like a list of statistics rather than a cohesive analysis. Improving the variety of cohesive devices and ensuring they are used to link ideas logically rather than just marking a new point would improve this score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision. There are several spelling errors ('diffrent', 'catagories', 'satuated', 'nutriants') and awkward word choices, such as 'commoners' to refer to people in the USA. The use of 'gradually' and 'rapidly' to describe percentages is a misuse of vocabulary, as these words imply a change over time. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise terminology for data reporting, such as 'accounted for,' 'constituted,' or 'the highest proportion,' and ensure you proofread for basic spelling mistakes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('these all are can be highly affected'), incorrect preposition usage ('regarding for Saturated fat'), and awkward phrasing ('which rate is 43%'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma placement around percentages. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and avoiding overly complex structures until you have mastered basic accuracy would be beneficial.
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