Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar charts illustrate the proportion of four types meals consumed in different catagories of nutrients in USA which has inclueded sodium, satuated fat and added sugar. These all are can be highly affected for health if eaten too much.
Overall, it is clear that most consumed of nutrients eat at dinner , but at breakfast it consumed less than other meals.
Firstly, commoners are consuming most sodium at dinner and lunch time which rate is 43% and 29% respectively, it is the most consumed rate all over the nutrients include all meals. However, snacks and breakfast consume rate is same only 14%.
Secondly, regarding for Saturated fat at breakfast takes only 16% but lunch and snacks are consumed nutients in meal slightly upper than breakfast the rate is 26% and 21% respectively. Also, it is showing at dinner people eat 37% of saturated fat which is the highest percentage above these meals.
Moreover, added sugar consumed most at snacks 42% which is the highest rate all over the nutriants. On the other hand, at breakfast, lunch and dinner these meals consumed added sugar sequentially, the rate is 16%,19% and 23% gradually.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, identifying key trends such as the high sodium content at dinner and the peak of added sugar in snacks. However, the report is marred by inaccuracies in data interpretation. For instance, you state that sodium consumption at breakfast and snacks is the same at 14%, but the chart shows different values. Additionally, the description of the data is somewhat mechanical, listing percentages without fully synthesizing the information to provide a clear comparative overview. To reach a higher band, ensure that data points are transcribed accurately and that the overview highlights the most significant differences between the nutrient categories more effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use basic cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'Moreover' to transition between ideas. However, the use of these markers is sometimes repetitive and mechanical. Furthermore, some sentences lack clear logical flow, such as the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the connection between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and phrases to create a more natural progression of information.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are several spelling errors (e.g., 'catagories', 'inclueded', 'satuated', 'nutriants') and awkward word choices. Phrases like 'commoners are consuming' are not appropriate for an academic report. While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary, the range is limited, and the errors in word formation occasionally distract the reader. To improve, focus on using precise terminology for data description and ensure that you proofread your work to eliminate basic spelling mistakes that detract from the professional tone required for an Academic Task 1 response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include incorrect verb forms ('these all are can be highly affected'), subject-verb agreement errors ('most consumed of nutrients eat at dinner'), and awkward phrasing ('which rate is 43%'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While these errors do not completely prevent the reader from understanding the main points, they are frequent enough to impede the flow of the text. Increasing the accuracy of basic sentence construction should be your primary focus.
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