Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The illustration shows the information about the different nutrients in meals, which are injurious to health if taken in a large quanitity.Overall,sodium in dinner and added sugar in snaks are the main focusing points and need an immediate breakdown.
It is quite evident from the Pie graph that the intake of all these nutrients in breakfast are almost same and are not excessive which is good sign.Butt saturated fat and added sugar are at very high percent in snacks,although sodium remains in control.The sodium in lunch time is at 29% which is not a good thing,while the other two are acceptable in lunch,butt should be reduced.
Furthermore,the percentage of sodium in dinner is alarming and stood at the top of the graph need to focous on it immediatly.Meanwhile,saturated fat is also not showing a good position,it is at 37% and also in the list of danger.Butt in added sugar things got a little change,it is at 23% which is fine and acceptable.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the charts by mentioning sodium, saturated fat, and added sugar across different meals. However, the approach is marred by an overly subjective and inappropriate tone, such as calling the percentages 'injurious to health' and stating they 'need an immediate breakdown' or are 'in the list of danger.' In Academic Task 1, candidates should present an objective, neutral overview rather than giving personal or alarming commentary. Furthermore, key comparisons are not fully realized, and data reporting is occasionally vague or imprecise, missing specific figures for some categories. Consequently, the response meets the minimum length requirement but only partially satisfies the core requirements of Task Achievement, leading to a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is divided into three brief paragraphs, attempting a rudimentary structure with an overall statement followed by body details. However, progression is hindered by poor paragraphing logic and a lack of cohesive devices. Cohesive links are either missing or misused, with repetitive reliance on conjunctions like 'Butt' (spelled incorrectly as well). Referencing is unclear at times, and there are mechanical errors in punctuation and spacing, such as missing spaces after commas and periods. While an overall arrangement exists, the inadequate use of cohesive devices and faulty referencing place this criterion firmly at a Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, featuring basic terms like 'high percent', 'good thing', and 'fine and acceptable'. There are several spelling mistakes, including 'quanitity', 'snaks', and repeated occurrences of 'Butt' instead of 'But'. The student attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'injurious', 'alarming', and 'immediatly', but these are often used inappropriately or inaccurately in tone and collocation. These noticeable errors and spelling mistakes cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect a Band 5.0 level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar and punctuation is weak. There are frequent errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'sodium in dinner and added sugar in snaks... need', 'percentage of sodium in dinner... stood at the top... need to focous'), missing articles, and run-on structures. Punctuation is frequently faulty, with missing spaces after punctuation marks and capitalization errors (e.g., 'Overall', 'Butt'). These frequent errors and the lack of error-free complex sentences restrict the grammar score to a Band 5.0.
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