Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The pie charts represent the types of meals nutrients in percentages if all of eaten too much which may be unhealthy.
Overall, it is clear that the large proportion of nurients was in dinner as well as the lowest proportion of nutrients were in meal which were in breakfastand equal in proportion as well.
Firstly, the percentage of Sodium were very high in dinner and low at (snacks and breakfast) which were 43 percent and 14 respectively. Sodium nutrients were same in breakfast as well as in snacks that were 14% and lunch was just 29% Sodium in meal. Secondely, Saturated fat in meals nutrients were hit its peak which was 37% at dinner and show minor difference at breakfast, snacks and lunch which are rspectively 16%, 21% and 26%.
On the other hand, the maximum percentage of suger in meals was 42% in snacks ans 16% was in breakfast and also 190% in luch. The dinner shows second high number wasin meal is 2
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by reporting several data points from the charts, such as noting that sodium was highest in dinner at 43% and added sugar peaked in snacks at 42%. However, there are significant issues with data accuracy and misinterpretation. For instance, the text claims that '190% in luch' (likely a typo for 19% at lunch) and ends abruptly with 'dinner shows second high number wasin meal is 2'. The overview provided in the second paragraph is confusing and grammatically fractured. While some main features are selected, the response struggles to consistently report the data accurately and lacks a fully developed, coherent summary of the visual information, placing it firmly in band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The organization of the response is problematic. Although the student attempts to use transition words like 'Firstly', 'Secondely', and 'On the other hand', the logical progression is hindered by severe grammatical breakdown and disjointed sentences. Paragraphing is attempted, but the final sentence is cut off mid-thought ('dinner shows second high number wasin meal is 2'), which disrupts the overall flow. Reference pronouns and cohesive ties are sometimes unclear or mechanical, such as repeating 'meals nutrients' awkwardly. The structure degrades toward the end of the text, resulting in a performance that meets the criteria for band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, relying heavily on words directly lifted from the prompt such as 'percentage', 'sodium', 'saturated fat', 'added sugar', 'breakfast', 'lunch', 'dinner', and 'snacks'. There are numerous spelling and word-choice errors, including 'nurients', 'fresk' (implied fresh), 'suger', 'ans', 'luch', and 'rspectively'. The student attempts less common terms but fails to use them accurately, and typos like '190%' severely affect clarity. The lexical range is limited and minimally adequate for the task, matching the descriptor for band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, and sentence structures are frequently faulty. The student attempts complex sentences, but they are marred by major errors in subject-verb agreement and preposition use, such as 'the large proportion of nurients was in dinner as well as the lowest proportion of nutrients were in meal' and 'Sodium were very high'. Punctuation is weak, and several sentences are incomplete or trail off into nonsense, particularly at the end of the response. Frequent errors cause substantial difficulty for the reader and obscure meaning, reflecting the descriptors for band 4.0.
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