Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The pie chart demonstartes the average propotion in meals of three distinctive nutrients, all together can be unhealthyif taken too much.
Overall, dinner and snacks contribute highest percentage in sodium, while snacks experienced huge propotion in added sugars. Furthermore the sodium and saturated fat contribute minor percentage in snacks. Moreover, the percentage of all nutrients in lunch meal were at average.
he pie chart demonstartes the average propotion in meals of three distinctive nutrients, all together can be unhealthyif taken too much.
Overall, dinner and snacks contribute highest percentage in sodium, while snacks experienced huge propotion in added sugars. Furthermore the sodium and saturated fat contribute minor percentage in snacks. Moreover, the percentage of all nutrients in lunch meal were at average.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response identifies the core subject matter—the average percentages of sodium, saturated fats, and added sugars in typical US meals—and attempts to outline main features such as the high sodium and saturated fat content at dinner. However, the text suffers from a critical penalty because it is significantly under-length, containing only 122 words compared to the required 150-word minimum. Furthermore, the content is heavily repetitive, with the entire body paragraph duplicated word-for-word. While some trends are mentioned, data reporting is vague (e.g., using terms like 'minor percentage' and 'at average' without specific numerical support) and the analysis is incomplete.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The response attempts an overview sentence, but the structural integrity is severely compromised by the exact duplication of the entire paragraph. Paragraphing is chaotic due to this repetition. There are some basic cohesive devices used, such as 'Overall', 'Furthermore', and 'Moreover', but referencing is weak, and the lack of proper progression and distinct paragraph development pulls the organizational score down significantly.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, featuring frequent misspellings such as 'demonstartes', 'propotion', 'distinctive' (used instead of distinct), and 'unhealthyif'. Phrases like 'contribute highest percentage' and 'experienced huge propotion' lack natural collocation and precision. The range of vocabulary is limited and inadequate for a fully realized Academic Task 1 response, though the core meaning of the topic remains partially understandable.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The grammatical structures attempted are very simple, mostly consisting of basic subject-verb-object patterns. There are noticeable grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing prepositions and articles (e.g., 'contribute highest percentage', 'lunch meal were at average') as well as run-on constructions like 'all together can be unhealthyif taken too much'. The complete duplication of the second paragraph also indicates a lack of proofreading and control over the writing process.
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