Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The illustration of proportion the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

overall,it is immediately apparent that sodium conusumed very highly in dinner 43%,followed by snacks and breakfast.

conversely,lunch represented the second-largest contributor 29% sodium.that meanwhile breakfast and snacks it's similar 14% .The anothe part saturated fat its curical in our life and healthy if we use exactly the higher surge its 37% in dinner and second its lunch of 26% usually we see that breakfast and snacks its 16%and21%

The cruicial point in contrast,the proportions of the remaining sources were highly addsuger its 42% in a snacks other its below 23% the three lunch,dinner and breakfast its on the range 16% to 23% thats consumed a typical meals in usa

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response makes an attempt to summarise the charts regarding the average percentages of sodium, saturated fats, and added sugars in typical meals in the USA. However, the student fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, finishing at only 134 words. Furthermore, the selection of main features is rather fragmented and difficult to follow due to poor expression. While the response mentions key high and low points, such as sodium at 43% for dinner and added sugar at 42% for snacks, the information is presented in a very disorganised and superficial manner. This places the response firmly in Band 5, as the task is only partially addressed with limited and underdeveloped ideas, compounded by the word count penalty.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text suffers from severe organisational and cohesive issues. The layout lacks proper paragraphing, and sentences are run together without appropriate punctuation or capitalization (e.g., 'overall,it is immediately apparent...', 'conversely,lunch represented...'). There is a lack of logical progression, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of the three nutrients. Cohesive devices are either missing, misused, or mechanically applied, such as 'The anothe part' and 'The cruicial point in contrast'. The overall arrangement lacks coherence, leading to a Band 4 score for this criterion.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and heavily repetitive, with frequent spelling errors such as 'conusumed', 'curical', 'surge', 'cruicial', and 'addsuger'. The range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate to convey the basic data, but word choices are often inaccurate or unidiomatic in an academic context. While the student attempts to use some topic-related vocabulary like 'percentages', 'nutrients', and 'proportions', the high frequency of lexical errors and poor word formation restricts the score to a Band 4.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the response. There is a near-total absence of correct sentence boundaries, leading to run-on sentences and fragments (e.g., 'that meanwhile breakfast and snacks it's similar 14%'). Basic verbs and pronouns are frequently misused or omitted entirely (e.g., 'sodium conusumed very highly in dinner', 'the three lunch,dinner and breakfast its on the range 16% to 23%'). The range of structures is very limited, and frequent errors significantly distort meaning and impede communication, corresponding to Band 4.

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