Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
in the pie chart shows about the consumed nutrition in their daily life fe meal that going to be unhealthy for the human body.
as we discuss with the first chart that shows the sodium intake in the snacks and the breakfast are the same percentage, but the lunch and the dinner is more than half in their one meal and if we combined the dinner and the lunch that should be too much in their meal.
the secondly we talk about the saturated fat in dinner meal less than half and in the breakfast not that comparised to the other meals.
lastly the added sugar in their snack meal which is nearly half of the percentage or as in their dinner meal 3/4 of contain
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, containing only 126 words, which severely impacts task achievement. Furthermore, the selection of main features is inadequate and lacks a clear overview. While the student attempts to describe some individual data points, such as noting that sodium intake from snacks and breakfast are the same at 14%, the interpretations are often vague or inaccurate (e.g., describing added sugar in dinner as '3/4 of contain'). Comparisons between nutrients and meals are poorly formulated, and the overall summary does not adequately cover all three charts provided in the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The essay lacks clear paragraphing and is presented as a single, poorly structured block of text. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or incorrectly, such as 'as we discuss with the first chart', 'the secondly', and 'lastly'. There is no clear logical progression or overview to guide the reader through the data. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow which nutrient or meal the student is referring to in several instances.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent word-choice errors and awkward phrasing such as 'consumed nutrition in their daily life fe meal', 'lunch and the dinner is more than half', and '3/4 of contain'. There is a lack of control over collocation and academic register, relying heavily on conversational and imprecise language instead of appropriate statistical or comparative vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences are poorly constructed, and attempts at complex structures result in severe grammatical errors, run-on sentences, and faulty subordination, such as in 'in the pie chart shows about the consumed nutrition...' and 'if we combined the dinner and the lunch that should be too much'. Errors in tense, agreement, and prepositions are frequent and consistently impede communication.
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