Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The pie chart illustrates thhe average percentages of the typical meals in USA.Overall, dinner as the highest percentage in usa,therefor lunch is avrage percentageand breakfast is over all percentages whereas snakes part inside suger very high. Inconstrat three part in different percentages sodium, saturated fat and suger this chart.
Initially, dinner is the most highest percentage sodium and saturated because peoples are most demanding meal in USA.inside sodium 43 percentage and saturated fat in 37 percentage. Whereas part of suger 23 percentage use in USA. Basically breakfast parts saturated fat and sugar 16 percentage same use and sodium part use in 14 precentage.
On the others hand, lunch use in USA 29 sodium percentag and saturated fat 26 percent and suger inside lowest percent 19. Therefor, lunch is average in all parts because lunch are not demanding in USA. lunch in use sodium part 29 percent and saturated fat 26 percent because peoples not like outside food. AS, most cheap part in suger part 19 percent. They all parts of different typs of percentage.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response makes an attempt to present information from the charts, noting some key data points such as the high percentage of sodium and saturated fat for dinner, and snacks leading in added sugar. However, the response only partially addresses the task. The overview is fragmented and fails to provide a clear summary of the main trends across all three nutrients, and several comparisons are inaccurate or unclear. For instance, stating that breakfast has saturated fat and sugar at 16 percent simultaneously misrepresents how the data is categorized, and the ideas presented are limited and under-developed throughout the body paragraphs. To move to a higher level, you should ensure all major features are accurately reported and supported by a clear, coherent overview of the visual data.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
There is some basic organization into paragraphs, and transitional markers are attempted, such as 'Initially' and 'On the others hand'. However, there is no clear overall progression of ideas, and the logical flow is frequently disrupted by awkward phrasing and repetition. Cohesive devices are often inadequate or inaccurate, as seen in the confusing transitions between sentences and the overuse of conversational filler phrases like 'basically' and 'AS'. Furthermore, referencing and paragraphing lack the structure needed to guide the reader smoothly through the comparison of the three charts. To improve, you need to use cohesive devices more accurately and structure your paragraphs so that each focuses on a distinct, logically sequenced comparison.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors such as 'thhe', 'avrage', 'snakes', 'suger', 'Inconstrat', and 'typs'. Word choice is often inappropriate or imprecise, leading to expressions that obscure meaning, such as 'most demanding meal' or 'cheap part in suger'. The range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for the task, causing noticeable difficulty for the reader in understanding the intended data points. To achieve a higher band, you need to expand your range of vocabulary, use precise terms related to data reporting (such as 'proportion', 'category', or 'consumption'), and carefully check your spelling and word forms before submitting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and direct, faulty assertions. Attempts at complex or compound sentences are frequently flawed, featuring missing verbs, incorrect prepositions, and severe agreement issues, such as 'dinner as the highest percentage' and 'peoples not like outside food'. Grammatical errors and punctuation mistakes are frequent throughout the text, often causing difficulty and confusion for the reader. To improve your grammar score, you should focus on constructing complete sentences with correct subjects and verbs, avoid run-on clauses, and practice using appropriate verb tenses and forms when describing statistical data.
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