Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The charts illustrates the average percentages in typical meals with three types of nutrients. In USA average percentage of sodium fats mainly use in breakfast and dinner.
Overall, childreans often eats 14% of sodium in snacks in the school meals while saturated fat adds with 37% of adults meal in dinner. however, average percentages of sodium is significantly lower than sugar. also there are higher uses of sodium in comparisons of saturated fat in lunch.
There are mainly people eats sugar with 23% in dinner and continuous eating total 43% in snacks which is compared in meals. Although, There is adults meals diagram is totally different from kids meals in USA with lots of diffrent types of changes in their meals which is higher levels of sugar with total percentage of 21%.
In comparisons for all three types of meals there are sodium is higher in dinner and at the same time saturated fat and sugar consumed balanc3 dieats in USA.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the visual data regarding sodium, saturated fats, and added sugars in typical US meals, presenting a partial overview with some key figures such as the 43% of sodium in dinner and 42% of added sugar in snacks. However, the task is only partially addressed because the student misinterprets the categories, frequently referring to 'childreans' or 'adults meals' which are not specified in the charts, and introduces irrelevant comparisons. Furthermore, the selection of data is somewhat haphazard, and the response lacks a clear, fully developed reporting structure, keeping the score at this level.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The organization of information lacks a clear overall progression. While the writer uses basic cohesive devices like 'Overall' and 'Although', their usage is often clumsy or inaccurate, such as starting a sentence with 'however, average percentages...' and using 'also'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal sequencing of ideas is disjointed and hard to follow, with abrupt shifts between topics like sodium, sugar, and demographic assumptions not supported by the prompt. Referencing and logical transitions between sentences are frequently faulty, leading to a breakdown in readability.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, featuring basic terms alongside frequent word-choice and word-form errors that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'childreans', 'diffrent', and awkward phrases like 'continuous eating total 43%' and 'balanc3 dieats'. The student attempts some less common vocabulary related to the chart, but these attempts are marred by inaccurate collocations and spelling mistakes (e.g., mixing numbers and letters). The lexical range is minimally adequate for the task, but lacks the precision required for a higher score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The writing demonstrates a very limited range of structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent attempts at complex forms that are severely faulty. There are persistent errors in basic grammar, including subject-verb agreement ('The charts illustrates', 'there are sodium is'), incorrect verb tenses and forms ('people eats', 'is adults meals diagram'), and missing articles. Punctuation is also problematic, with sentences starting with lowercase letters following periods or commas misplaced. These frequent errors cause significant difficulty and strain for the reader throughout the text.
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