Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
their three pir charts illustrates the propotion of average percentages sodium , saturated fat and added sugar in typical meals consumed in usa of nutrients , all are unhealthy if eaten too much .
Overall, majority of people eaten too much sodium and Saturated fat in dinnner but added sugar mostly eat in snacks these value a are holds large percentile of typical meals . moreover, in breakfast they eat less quantity of sodium, saturated fat additional sugar they onnly consume near by 15%.
sodium and saturated fat are contain large number by US public in dinner it's 43 and 37 percentage respectively additionaly added sugar holds only 23% of portion . altough in breakfast they both three meals hold small portion of chart thier values are 14%, 16% and 16% respectively .
however , added sugar consumed more space in snacks it's holds 42% value of suggar but sodium and saturated fat only holds 14 and 16 percentile of thier routine . lastly in lunch these both three typical meals are sodium , saturated fat and sugar hols only 29 , 26 , 19 average percentage of usa people's .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5
The response successfully addresses all parts of the prompt by presenting an overview and reporting the main features of the three pie charts regarding sodium, saturated fat, and added sugar. The candidate correctly identifies key data points, such as dinner accounting for the highest percentages of sodium (43%) and saturated fat (37%), while snacks dominate added sugar consumption at 42%. However, the response sits at this level because some ideas are more fully developed than others, and certain details are slightly imprecise. For instance, the discussion of lunch and breakfast touches on the correct figures (such as 14% for breakfast sodium and saturated fat), but the overall reporting tends to generalise without providing a fully integrated comparison across all four meal times. To reach the next level, the candidate should ensure that all main trends are seamlessly connected and supported by precise, fully articulated comparative statements throughout.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The report demonstrates a coherent overall arrangement with a clear attempt to structure the information by meals and nutrients, opening with an introductory paraphrase and an overall summary statement. Paragraphing is present, grouping different meals together. However, cohesion is frequently mechanical and sometimes faulty. The candidate relies heavily on basic transitional words and repetitive phrasing, such as 'respectively' and 'however', without always managing referencing clearly. For example, sentences like 'thier values are 14%, 16% and 16% respectively' create ambiguity regarding which nutrient corresponds to which figure without closer inspection. To achieve a higher band, the writer needs to employ a wider range of cohesive devices more naturally and ensure that referencing and paragraph transitions guide the reader smoothly through the logical progression of data.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, successfully conveying basic statistical concepts and nutrient names such as 'sodium', 'saturated fat', and 'added sugar'. The candidate attempts some less common vocabulary and comparative language, but there are noticeable lexical and spelling inaccuracies throughout the text, such as 'pir charts', 'propotion', 'dinnner', 'suggar', and 'hols'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they restrict the lexical score. Additionally, word choice is occasionally awkward, such as 'these value a are holds large percentile' rather than 'these values account for a large proportion'. To improve, the writer should expand their repertoire of academic reporting vocabulary, focus on precise word formation, and eliminate frequent spelling slips.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The writing exhibits a limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences alongside some attempts at complex forms that are frequently marred by structural errors. There are numerous persistent errors in grammar, agreement, articles, and punctuation, such as missing subject-verb agreement in 'their three pir charts illustrates', incorrect prepositions in phrases like 'eat in snacks', and run-on sentences joined by commas instead of proper conjunctions or full stops. Punctuation and capitalization are also inconsistent. Although the meaning can generally be deciphered, the high frequency of basic grammatical slips places the response at this band. To progress, the student must practice forming error-free complex sentences, maintain strict control over verb tenses and pluralisation, and improve punctuation accuracy.
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