Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart illustrates the average rate of nutrients, such as sodium, saturated fat and added sugar eaten by USA people. All these 3 are dangarous for health those who eaten in a huge amount.

Oveall, it is clear that sodium and saturated fat consume most in the dinner time while added sugar etaen most at the snacks time.

When it comes sodium, dinner took the first place with a ratio of 43%, follwed by saturated fat at 37%. Added sugar belonged to the lowest place with a proportion of 23%. Although the percentages are not similar but the amount of eaten the nutrients in lunch decreased in a similar way. The pecentages are 29%,26% and 19%.

In terms of breakfast, all the nutrients had a similar proportion about 16%. on the other hand, in snacks sodium and saturated fat had a similarity of 14% and 21%, but had a big diffrence with added sugar it about 42%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main pattern accurately: sodium and saturated fat peak at dinner, while added sugar is highest in snacks. Several figures are also reported correctly, including dinner’s 43% sodium and 37% saturated fat, lunch’s 29%, 26% and 19%, and snacks’ 42% added sugar. This gives the response a relevant overview and supports its comparisons. However, the breakfast figures are described as all being “about 16%,” although sodium is 14%; the overview could also make the contrast between dinner and snacks more explicit. Some comparisons are unclear, particularly “the amount of eaten the nutrients in lunch decreased in a similar way.” A more precise account of each meal’s key pattern would make the coverage more complete and clear.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs comparing dinner and lunch with breakfast and snacks. This helps the reader follow the broad organisation, and phrases such as “When it comes to” and “In terms of” signal shifts between meals. However, progression within the comparisons is sometimes difficult to follow. For example, “When it comes sodium” introduces dinner, but the sentence then lists saturated fat and added sugar without clearly stating that all three figures refer to dinner. The contrast marker “Although” in the lunch sentence does not lead to a clear contrasting idea. Use clearer grouping by meal or nutrient, and connect each figure explicitly to its category to make cohesion less dependent on formulaic transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “percentages,” “similarity,” and “consumed,” and the reader can generally understand the comparisons. However, the range and control are limited, with several inaccurate or unnatural choices: “average rate of nutrients,” “took the first place,” and “belonged to the lowest place” do not describe chart proportions naturally. Spelling errors such as “dangarous,” “follwed,” “pecentages,” and “diffrence” are noticeable and reduce precision. Some wording is also repetitive, especially repeated references to “proportion” and “percentages.” Build a more accurate set of chart collocations, such as “accounted for,” “was highest,” and “the lowest share,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast with “Although” and a clause beginning “while,” but control is inconsistent. Examples include “All these 3 are dangarous for health those who eaten in a huge amount,” where the clause structure and verb form are faulty, and “in snacks sodium and saturated fat had a similarity,” where the sentence pattern is awkward. There are also errors in articles, agreement, and punctuation, such as the lowercase “on” after a full stop and the missing comma after introductory phrases. These problems sometimes make relationships between ideas harder to understand. Practise building accurate comparison sentences with clear subjects and verbs, and proofread sentence boundaries and clause links.

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