Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This charts show the average percentages three types of nutrients in the USA that is the sodium and saturated fat first in breakfast sodium is consued 14% and saturated fat consumed 16% in breakfast and in lunch sodium is used 29% and saturated fat are used 26% in lunch sodium is much greater in used and other is less used after this in dinner sodium can used 43% that is a big persentage and saturated fat used 37% this amount is less than sodium amount and in snackes sodium can use 14% and in saturated fat consumed 21% in breakfast added sugar consumed 16% and in dinner suger can used 23% in lunch added sugar are consumed 19% at last in snackes added sugar are consumed 42% in the snackes half of the amount is consumed of 100% and in sodium half amount is used in dinner of 100%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You include several accurate figures, such as sodium at 43% for dinner and added sugar at 42% for snacks, and you make some direct comparisons between nutrients. However, the response mainly lists values rather than summarising the charts’ key patterns, and it has no clear overview. Important contrasts are left implicit: dinner is highest for sodium and saturated fat, while snacks are highest for added sugar. The statement that snacks account for “half” of added sugar is also imprecise, since the figure is 42%. The response is one word below the required minimum of 150 words. To improve, add a concise overview, organise the main comparisons, and report the figures accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response follows a basic sequence through breakfast, lunch, dinner and snacks, so a reader can identify some of the information being discussed. However, it is presented as one long sentence-like block, with no paragraphing or clear separation of an overview from supporting details. Linking phrases such as “after this” and “at last” provide only a mechanical sequence, and the repeated references to sodium and saturated fat make the progression difficult to follow. The shift to added sugar is not clearly signposted. Use separate paragraphs and group the data by the main pattern—for example, dinner’s high sodium and saturated fat figures versus snacks’ high added sugar figure—to create a clearer progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “average percentages,” “consumed,” and “amount,” and the nutrient names are generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and repetitive: “used” and “consumed” recur throughout, while several spellings and word forms are inaccurate, including “persentage,” “snackes,” and “suger.” Some expressions are also unnatural or unclear, such as “sodium is much greater in used” and “half of the amount is consumed of 100%.” Choose precise reporting verbs and comparison phrases, and check spelling carefully. For example, describe a figure as “accounted for” a percentage and say it was “higher than” another figure, rather than repeating “used.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect several pieces of information in longer sentences, but sentence structures are very limited and frequent grammatical errors make relationships between figures unclear. For example, “This charts show” has incorrect subject–verb agreement, and “in lunch sodium is used 29%” has an inaccurate sentence pattern. There are also problems with articles, verb forms and agreement in phrases such as “saturated fat are used” and “sodium can used 43%.” Punctuation is largely absent, creating run-on sentences. Practise writing short, complete comparison sentences with a clear subject and verb, such as “At lunch, sodium accounts for 29%, compared with 26% for saturated fat,” then combine ideas only when the grammar remains controlled.

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