Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given pie charts depicts the proportion of sodium, saturated fat, added sugar which are unhealthy if eaten too much in a typical meal. The data is given in percentage.

Overall, in the dinner, amount of sodium is the highest. Whereas, in the breakfast and snacks, the least amount of sodium is found.

At first glance, dinner contains the highest amount of sodium that is 43% followed by added sugar in snacks recorded as 42%. However, less than quarter amount of sugar is found in dinner. The value of sodium is similar in both breakfast and snacks that is 14%.

Moving further, lunch includes the figures of sodium and saturated fat with the difference of only 3%. The percentage of added sugar is 16% and 19% in breakfast and lunch ,respectively. More than one in fifth amount, a saturated fat is present in lunch. While only 16% of it is present in breakfast.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important features accurately, including dinner’s highest sodium share (43%), snacks’ highest added-sugar share (42%), and the equal sodium figures for breakfast and snacks (14%). You also make relevant comparisons between lunch’s sodium and saturated-fat proportions. However, the overview is incomplete: it does not summarise the contrasting pattern that dinner leads in sodium and saturated fat, while snacks lead in added sugar. Some details are also unclear or inaccurate; for example, “less than quarter amount of sugar is found in dinner” is vague, and dinner’s added sugar is 23%, not simply an unspecified amount below a quarter. Covering the main patterns across all three nutrients more fully would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to two detail paragraphs, and the information is generally easy to follow. Connectors such as “Overall,” “At first glance,” and “Moving further” help signal progression. However, some linking is mechanical or awkward, particularly “At first glance” and “Moving further,” which do not clearly show how the comparisons relate. The overview also repeats the point that dinner has the most sodium, already stated in the following paragraph. Grouping details by the meal with the highest or lowest figures, and using clearer links between comparisons, would improve progression and reduce repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of topic vocabulary, including “proportion,” “percentage,” “difference,” and “contains,” and the meaning is usually clear. There are also attempts at more formal reporting language, such as “recorded as.” However, several expressions are imprecise or unnatural: “amount of sodium” is less suitable for a percentage, “less than quarter amount of sugar” is unclear, and “more than one in fifth amount” is not idiomatic. Repeated use of “amount” also limits precision. Prefer terms such as “share,” “proportion,” and “accounted for,” and describe each figure directly. This would make comparisons more natural and accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex structures, including the relative clause in “which are unhealthy if eaten too much” and the comparison in “with the difference of only 3%.” Most of the intended meaning can be understood, but some grammatical errors remain. The opening has subject–verb disagreement in “The given pie charts depicts,” and “in the dinner” and “in the breakfast” use unnecessary articles. The fragment beginning “Whereas” is not properly joined to the preceding sentence, while “While only 16% of it is present in breakfast” is also a fragment. Review agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries, and connect dependent clauses to complete sentences.

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