Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie charts depict an average proportion of the nutrients like sodium, saturated fat and added sugar eaten in USA, all of which may be harmful if consumed too much.

Overall, all these three nutrients share the largest proportion in the dinner, comparatively consumers consume the smallest amount of sodium, saturated fat and added sugar in their breakfast.

All these nutrients share 14% of sodium and 16% of saturated fat and added sugar in the breakfast. Whereas the consumption of these nutrients is at its peak while having dinner, which share the figures of 23%, 37% and 42% respectively.

Furthermore, the individuals of USA take an average proportion of 14% of sodium, 26% saturated fat and 19% of added sugar in the lunch which might not affect their well-being. Conversely, people take 42% of added sugar in snacks which is extremely high, while snacks share only 14% and 21% of sodium and saturated fat respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the chart topic and provide an overview, but the overview contains a key misreading: dinner is not the largest meal for all three nutrients, because added sugar peaks in snacks at 42%. Several figures are also assigned to the wrong meals. For example, dinner is reported as 23%, 37% and 42%, whereas the chart shows 43%, 37% and 23% for sodium, saturated fat and added sugar respectively. Likewise, lunch sodium is 29%, not 14%. These inaccuracies weaken the comparison of the main features. You do include relevant details about breakfast and snacks, but the report would be stronger if each figure were checked against its meal and the overview highlighted the contrasting peaks: dinner for sodium and saturated fat, snacks for added sugar.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, a summary of the main pattern, and further comparisons. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Furthermore” and “Conversely” help signal how the information is developing, and the reader can follow the broad topic throughout. This organisation is effective, though the progression is not fully smooth: the second paragraph says dinner is the peak for all nutrients, while the final paragraph introduces the high snack figure for added sugar without revising that overview. “Whereas” also begins a sentence fragment after the breakfast statement. To strengthen cohesion, group the comparisons by meal or by nutrient, and ensure the overview and supporting details present a consistent account.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing chart data, including “proportion,” “consumption,” “peak” and “Conversely.” These choices make the topic and comparisons understandable, and there is some attempt to vary wording rather than repeat “percentage” throughout. However, several expressions are imprecise or unnatural for a data report: “share the largest proportion in the dinner,” “share the figures,” and “take an average proportion” do not collocate naturally. The phrase “which might not affect their well-being” also introduces an unsupported health judgement rather than describing the chart. Prefer concise, neutral reporting language such as “account for,” “make up” and “the figure for.” This would improve precision while retaining your current range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “which” and “while,” and most of the meaning remains clear. However, some grammatical errors and awkward constructions reduce accuracy. In “Whereas the consumption … is at its peak …, which share the figures,” the opening dependent clause is not properly connected, and “which share” does not agree with the singular subject “consumption.” The sentence beginning “All these nutrients share 14% of sodium…” also has an unclear structure, while “in USA” needs an article. Use complete, direct comparisons—for example, “At breakfast, sodium accounts for 14%, while saturated fat and added sugar each account for 16%.” More consistently controlled clauses and agreement would improve the report.

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