Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the pie chart show the average percentages in kind nutrients which is harmful if consume too much. The unites are mesured in percentage.

Overall, the average consumption of the sodium and saturated fat were more in dinner but consumed more sugar in snacks in the USA.

The compair two pie charts consumptions for sodium and saturated fat. in breakfast sodium and saturated fat used near same and it is 14% and 16% while dinner the use of sodium is higher than saturated fat and which is 43% and 37% respectively. when we look data for lunch it was sodium 29% and saturated fat was 26%. Snacks used more saturated fat compair to sodium and it is 21% and 14%.

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the main contrast correctly: sodium and saturated fat peak at dinner, while added sugar is highest in snacks. The figures you give for sodium and saturated fat also match the chart. However, the response is incomplete: it does not report any of the added-sugar figures beyond the overview, and it ends with the unfinished phrase “The”. This leaves a major part of the visual unreported, while the comparisons are limited to two nutrients. The response is also 30 words below the required minimum, which contributes to the lack of detail. To improve, complete the report and compare the added-sugar values across meals, especially the high snack figure and low breakfast figure.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic structure: an introduction, an overview, and a paragraph comparing sodium with saturated fat. The overview gives the reader a useful central contrast, and words such as “while” and “respectively” help connect comparisons. However, progression is limited because the report stops before covering added sugar and ends abruptly with “The”. The phrase “The compair two pie charts” does not clearly introduce the paragraph’s purpose, and the repeated meal-by-meal pattern makes the comparison somewhat mechanical. Organise the body around the main patterns, and use a separate paragraph for added sugar. A complete ending and clearer links between comparisons would make the information easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “average percentages”, “consumption”, “higher than”, and “respectively”, so the reader can understand the intended comparisons. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, such as “unites”, “mesured”, “compair”, and “used” where “accounted for” or “was” would be more suitable. Phrases such as “kind nutrients” and “the use of sodium” are imprecise for describing chart data. These errors do not prevent the main figures from being understood, but they make the report less clear and natural. Practise accurate collocations for describing proportions and vary the verbs used to report data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and comparisons, for example, “dinner the use of sodium is higher than saturated fat”. However, sentence structures are limited, and frequent errors in agreement, articles, and sentence formation make the writing difficult to read smoothly. In “the pie chart show”, the subject and verb do not agree; “the average consumption … were” also has incorrect agreement. Several clauses are joined without clear grammatical structure, as in “and which is 43% and 37% respectively”. Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, and the final “The” is an incomplete sentence. Use shorter, complete sentences first, checking subject–verb agreement and punctuation before attempting longer comparisons.

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