Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

This pie charts illustrates the portion of three nutrients which will be harmful to bodies if taken in too much quntatiy.These typical nutrients are sodium,saturated fats and added sugars in meal. In Snacks sodium is high in percentage which is 43per.while satured fats are 37per.moreover suger is 23per. On the other hand in dinner sodium is 43per.at the same time saturated fats are 37per. in addition in dinner meal contains suger 23per.meanwhile these nutreients are taken less in quantuity on breakfast and lunch In lunch sodium and saturated fat are merrly equal where sodium is 29per. and saturated fat is 29per.futhermore saturated fat and suder are same in the breakfast if we take these nuterients uin high quntatiy which may be harmfui to our boddies. In result we may be fallen ill our boddy does not work proparlly althouh we take in modrate quntatiy it will be good for health and provide us energy

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the three nutrients and attempts to compare meal categories, but it does not give a reliable summary of the chart’s main features. Several figures are misreported: snacks contain 14% sodium, not 43%; 43% belongs to dinner. The response also assigns dinner’s figures to snacks and repeats them for dinner. It says lunch sodium and saturated fat are both 29%, whereas saturated fat is 26%, and it misses the key contrast that added sugar is highest in snacks at 42%. The overview is unclear, and the final comments about health effects and energy are not information shown by the chart. To improve, report the largest and smallest shares accurately and organise the response around the main comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to connect ideas using phrases such as “On the other hand,” “moreover,” and “furthermore,” and the response broadly moves from nutrient figures to a concluding comment. However, the information is not arranged into clear paragraphs or a consistent comparison. The opening introduces the topic, but the figures then shift confusingly between snacks, dinner, lunch, and breakfast; repeated dinner values make the progression harder to follow. Some linking expressions do not show a clear relationship between the points they join. Grouping the data by meal or by nutrient, and using a separate overview before the details, would make the comparisons easier to track. Clearer sentence boundaries would also improve the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “sodium,” “saturated fats,” and “added sugars,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, spelling and word-choice problems are frequent, including “quntatiy,” “satured,” “suger,” and “nutreients.” Several expressions are also imprecise for describing data: “high in percentage” and “taken less in quantity” are awkward, while “merrly equal” does not accurately describe the lunch figures. The health-related phrases “fallen ill” and “provide us energy” are not useful for summarising this chart. Practise standard terms such as “accounted for,” “share,” “highest,” and “lowest,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to combine ideas with clauses and connectors, for example, “if we take these nutrients in high quantity,” but sentence structures are often incomplete or difficult to control. The opening, “This pie charts illustrates,” has a subject–verb agreement error, and several statements lack clear grammatical links between clauses. Articles and plural forms are inconsistent, as in “in dinner meal,” while punctuation is often missing or misplaced, causing long run-on sequences. The final sentence also shifts between conditional ideas without a clear structure. Build accuracy first with short comparative sentences, such as “Dinner accounts for 43% of sodium,” then combine them using correctly formed clauses. Check agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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