Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The pie charts illustrate the different proportion of nutrients in typical meals , which may be unhealthy if consumed more.

Overall, dinner has significant proportion of sodium and satiurated fat . Whereas, snacks have more amount of added sugar. While breakfast have less amount of nutrients

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You identify two valid overall patterns: dinner accounts for the largest shares of sodium and saturated fat, while snacks lead in added sugar. However, the response gives no figures or comparisons between meal types, and the claim that breakfast has the “less amount of nutrients” is not supported: breakfast is tied with snacks for the lowest sodium share, but not for saturated fat or added sugar. The summary is also far below the required 150 words, leaving the task only minimally addressed. To improve, report the key percentages—for example, dinner’s 43% of sodium and 37% of saturated fat, and snacks’ 42% of added sugar—and compare these with the other meals.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic overall direction: it introduces the charts and then gives a short overview of the main contrasts. The use of “Overall” helps signal that the second sentence is a summary. However, the ideas are compressed into two sentences, and “Whereas” begins a fragment rather than being joined to a complete clause. The final “While” clause is also not integrated clearly, so the relationships between the observations are difficult to follow. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview, and a paragraph comparing the figures, using complete sentences and clear links such as “by contrast” or “in comparison.”

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “nutrients,” “typical meals,” and “consumed,” so the topic is generally clear. However, the range is narrow and several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural: “different proportion” should be plural or rephrased, “significant proportion” is vague for describing the largest shares, and “more amount” is not a natural collocation. “Satiurated” is also misspelled, and “nutrients” is too broad when the charts show three specific nutrients. Use precise terms such as “share,” “percentage,” and the names of the nutrients, and vary language for comparing the meal categories.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few sentence patterns, including an introductory sentence and clauses beginning with “Whereas” and “While,” but these attempts do not consistently form complete, accurate sentences. “Whereas, snacks have more amount of added sugar” is a fragment, and “While breakfast have less amount of nutrients” is also incomplete; moreover, the singular subject “breakfast” requires “has.” The opening sentence has a plural subject (“charts”) but uses “illustrate” correctly, although the phrase structure around “different proportion” is faulty. Punctuation spacing is inconsistent, with spaces before commas and full stops. Build complete sentences with correct subject–verb agreement and use subordinate clauses only when attached to a main clause.

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