Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie charts illustrates the average proportion of nutrients in a meal in the USA, which can cause health problems, if a person eat that in a massive amount.

Overall, sodium has the big amount of health problems in dinner. After thst, saturated fat has higest amount o proportion in dinner and added sugar in snakes causes most health problems in the USA.

Starting with sodium, in dinner sodium has the large portion at figure of 43% which is higest in all other nutrients. 37% of sturated fat are present in a daily dinner of a person in the USA and 23% sugar in their dinner. In contarst 14% sodium in their breakfast and they have same amount of saturated fat anf added sugar with 16% respectively in their break fast.

in their lunch the people have 29% of sodium and 26 percent fat and 19 percent in their lunch . 14 percent snakes sodium and 21 fa

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify several important patterns, including dinner as the highest meal for sodium and saturated fat, and snacks as the highest for added sugar. You also report some accurate figures, such as 43% sodium and 37% saturated fat at dinner. However, the overview is unclear and inaccurately says dinner has the “big amount of health problems”; the charts show nutrient proportions, not health outcomes. The report is incomplete: the final sentence breaks off after “21 fa”, and the snack figures for saturated fat and added sugar are not fully presented. Some comparisons are also difficult to interpret. To strengthen the response, give a clear overview of the main contrasts and report the figures for all meals accurately and completely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response with an overview followed by details about sodium and meal-by-meal comparisons. Phrases such as “Overall,” “Starting with sodium,” and “In contrast” help signal the direction of the report. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview combines several claims unclearly, and the body shifts between nutrients and meals without a consistent structure. The final line is unfinished, leaving the comparison incomplete. Paragraphing and clearer grouping would help: for example, compare the three nutrients by meal, or describe each nutrient in turn, and complete each comparison before moving on. Use linking phrases only where they accurately show the relationship between figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “proportion,” “portion,” “sodium,” and “saturated fat,” so the reader can recognise the subject of the charts. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning unclear. For example, “big amount of health problems” does not describe the chart data, and “snakes” appears to be an incorrect spelling of “snacks.” There are also misspellings such as “higest,” “sturated,” and “contarst.” Aim for precise chart language such as “accounted for,” “percentage,” and “highest share,” and proofread spelling carefully. Avoid describing nutrient proportions as health problems, since the charts report meal composition.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and longer comparisons, but grammatical control is inconsistent and errors frequently make sentences awkward or unclear. For instance, “The pie charts illustrates” has subject–verb disagreement, while “if a person eat” has an incorrect verb form. Articles and sentence construction are also problematic in “in dinner sodium has the large portion at figure of 43%.” The final sentence is incomplete, and punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent, including the lowercase start “in their lunch.” Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, such as “At dinner, sodium accounts for 43%,” then add comparisons using correctly formed clauses. Check agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence endings during revision.

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