Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given chart illustrates the average percenatge in general meals of different types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Overview: Overall the proportion of nutrients increased in the snacks. In contrast, the amountof nutrients in lunch and dinner has declined. Whereas, the proportion of these nutrients in breakfast stayed moderate.

According to the pie chart, the percentage of nutrients in snacks had increased from 14% to 42%. While, the proportion of nutrients in breakfaast show a slight difference approximately from 14% to 16%. In contrast the

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the subject of the charts and attempt an overview, but the main features are not accurately or fully reported. The claim that nutrients “increased in the snacks” is too broad: snacks account for the highest added sugar share (42%), but only 14% of sodium and 21% of saturated fat. Likewise, lunch and dinner do not show a general decline; dinner has the highest sodium and saturated-fat figures. The response ends before completing its comparison and omits key information. It is also 79 words, below the required 150 words; the 13 words copied from the prompt are excluded from that count. To improve, give a clear overview of the contrasting peaks and support it with accurate comparisons across all four meals.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response with an opening, an overview and a detail paragraph, and linking expressions such as “Overall” and “In contrast” show an effort to guide the reader. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview makes broad claims that the details do not clarify, and the final sentence breaks off at “In contrast the”. The use of “Whereas” as a separate sentence fragment also weakens the flow. Develop a complete paragraph that compares the meal categories in a logical order, and use linking words only where the relationship between the figures is clear. A finished response with connected comparisons would make the organisation more coherent.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant vocabulary for describing charts, including “proportion”, “percentage”, “in contrast” and “slight difference”. This gives you a basic range for the task, but several choices are imprecise or repetitive: “nutrients” is used broadly where naming sodium, saturated fat and added sugar would be clearer, and “increased” suggests change over time rather than differences between meal categories. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “percenatge” and “breakfaast”, and the phrase “average percentage in general meals” is awkward. Aim for precise chart language such as “accounted for”, “was highest in” and “share”, while checking spelling and avoiding repeated general terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt more than simple statements, using contrast clauses and a comparative structure, as in “In contrast, the amount of nutrients in lunch and dinner has declined.” However, the range is limited and several sentences are incomplete or awkwardly formed. “Whereas, the proportion…” is a fragment, and “While, the proportion…” is also left without a main clause; the response then stops mid-sentence. The present perfect in “has declined” is not suitable for describing static chart categories, and “the proportion … show” has a subject–verb agreement error. Build complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use the present simple to report chart data. Punctuate subordinate clauses carefully rather than separating them from their main clauses.

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