Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The provided chart illustartes data regarding, how nutrients such as sodium, saturated fats and added sugars may be unhealthy if they consumed in excess.
overall, it is clear that there are four types of meal and three types of nutrients from breakfast to dinner, where the consumption of sodium, saturated fat, and added sugar during dinner recorded as highest, whereas consumption during breakfast recorded as lowest.
To initiate with, during breakfast the intake of sodium, saturated fat and added sugar accounted roughly 16% which may be harmful if eaten in excess, whereas during the nightime, intake reached to its peak around 23% to 43% which is not safe, on the other hand, during the lunch time the consumption of these nutrients recorded as average 19%-26% but it may be dangerous, and at last, during the snacks time added sugar is accounted as highest in percentage which is typically excessive while sodium and saturated fats recorded as average.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You identify the three nutrients and meal categories, and your overview attempts to highlight the main contrasts: dinner is highest for sodium and saturated fat, while snacks lead for added sugar. However, the overview is partly inaccurate because it says breakfast is lowest overall; breakfast is lowest for sodium and saturated fat, but lunch has the lowest added-sugar figure. Several figures are also misreported: breakfast is 14% sodium, not roughly 16%, and the dinner range is 23%–43%, which combines the added-sugar and sodium values but omits the 37% saturated-fat figure. The response selects relevant features, but comparisons are broad and some key distinctions are unclear. Report each nutrient’s pattern more precisely to make the summary more complete.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a basic structure, with an introduction, an overview and a final paragraph comparing meal types. This gives the reader a general route through the information. However, the progression within the final paragraph is difficult to follow: it moves from breakfast to dinner, then lunch and snacks, while using connectors such as “on the other hand” and “at last” without a clear contrast or sequence. The long final sentence also combines several comparisons, making the relationships between figures less clear. Organise the details into a more consistent pattern—for example, compare meals nutrient by nutrient—and use linking phrases only where they accurately signal the relationship between ideas.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “sodium,” “saturated fat,” “added sugar,” “intake” and “consumption,” so the subject is generally clear. However, the range is limited by repeated use of “consumption” and “recorded,” and several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “intake reached to its peak,” “during the nightime,” and “added sugar is accounted as highest.” There are also spelling errors, including “illustartes” and “nightime.” These choices sometimes make the comparisons harder to understand. Build a more precise range for describing chart data, using terms such as “accounted for,” “stood at,” and “was the highest,” and check spelling and collocations carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
You attempt longer sentences and use clauses to connect comparisons, but control is uneven, particularly in the final paragraph. For example, “how nutrients … may be unhealthy if they consumed in excess” is missing the auxiliary “are,” and “intake reached to its peak” has an incorrect grammatical pattern. The sentence beginning “To initiate with” also runs through several comparisons with weak punctuation, while “added sugar is accounted as highest” has an incomplete construction. Capitalisation is inconsistent, as “overall” begins a sentence in lowercase. These errors sometimes obscure the intended relationships. Practise accurate comparative sentence patterns and divide the final paragraph into shorter, clearly punctuated sentences.
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