Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart give the percantage of meals that is to much eaten in the country of USA that three type of nutrient . USA have three typical meals that is sodium saturated fat and added sugar. USA dinner have 43 percent sodium and lunch have 29 percent sodium. breakfast and snacks have same parcentage of soudium.and USA dinner have 37 percent saturated fat and lunch have 26 percent saturated fat. breakfast and snacks have also 21 percent and other have 16 percent saturated fat. USA also taken sugar 42 percent in snacks. that is more. USA take sugar in dinner 23 percent. USA take sugar less in lunch and breakfast that is 19 percent and 16 percent .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You report several relevant figures accurately, including dinner’s 43% share of sodium, lunch’s 29%, and snacks’ 42% share of added sugar. However, the response gives no clear overview of the main patterns, such as dinner being highest for sodium and saturated fat while snacks lead for added sugar. Some details are unclear: “breakfast and snacks have same percentage of sodium” is accurate at 14% each, but the saturated-fat figures are presented confusingly. The response is also below the required 150 words, limiting how fully you can select and explain the key features. Add a concise overview and compare the three nutrients systematically, using the available space to make the main contrasts clear.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows a basic sequence, moving from sodium to saturated fat and then added sugar, so the reader can identify the broad topic of each section. However, it is presented as one continuous paragraph, with little overall progression from an introduction to an overview and then supporting details. Repeated sentence openings such as “USA dinner have” and “USA take sugar” make the writing sound list-like, while links between comparisons are limited. Organise the response into paragraphs and use clear comparison signals such as “whereas,” “by contrast,” and “similarly.” A brief overview before the detailed figures would also help the reader understand the main pattern.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “sodium,” “saturated fat,” “added sugar,” and meal names, which allows the reader to recognise the categories being compared. However, the range is limited and several choices or spellings reduce clarity, including “percantage,” “soudium,” and “to much eaten.” The repeated wording “USA take sugar” is also unnatural for describing chart data. Use more precise reporting language and vary it appropriately, for example, “accounts for,” “makes up,” or “the proportion of.” Check spelling carefully, and avoid calling the nutrients “meals”: they are nutrients shown across typical meals.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences use a simple subject–verb pattern, and the reader can generally follow the intended comparisons. However, grammatical errors occur frequently, and the range of sentence structures is very limited. For example, “The chart give” has subject–verb disagreement, while “USA dinner have 43 percent sodium” lacks the grammatical structure needed to express the figure clearly. The opening sentence also has problems with articles, plurals, and sentence construction. Practise accurate comparative patterns such as “Dinner accounts for 43% of sodium, compared with 29% at lunch.” Use full stops to separate complete ideas and check agreement between subjects and verbs.

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