Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie charts illustrates the average percentages of sodium, saturated fat and added sugar in common meals, all of these may be injurious to health if consumed without limit.

Overall, In US people consume a very high in sodium dinner, while saturated fats are the second most unhealthy ingredient in a typical US dinner. In US people eat very high sugar snacks.

To start with, in America dinner comprises 43% of sodium, while 29% of sodium is present in lunch. Breakfast and snacks both contains 14% of sodium.

On the other hand, in a typical US dinner 37% of saturated fats are present, while lunch contains 26% of saturated fats. Breakfast and snacks have 16% and 21% of saturated fats respectively.

Furthermore, American consumed sugar mostly in the form of snacks that is 42% in proportion, while 23% of sugar is consumed in the dinner. Breakfast and lunch contain 16% and 19% of sugar respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover all three nutrients and report the figures accurately, including dinner’s highest shares of sodium and saturated fat and snacks’ highest share of added sugar. The overview identifies these main contrasts, so the reader can see the broad pattern. However, the overview is not fully clear: “saturated fats are the second most unhealthy ingredient in a typical US dinner” is an imprecise comparison and does not explain the overall distribution as directly as the other points. Some details are also presented as separate lists rather than compared across nutrients or meals. To strengthen the response, give a concise overview of the key contrasts—for example, dinner leads in sodium and saturated fat, whereas snacks lead in added sugar—and make the comparisons more precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction and overview are followed by separate paragraphs on sodium, saturated fat and sugar. This makes the information easy to locate, and transitions such as “On the other hand” and “Furthermore” help signal movement between points. However, the progression is somewhat mechanical because each body paragraph follows the same pattern of listing the largest figures and then the remaining meals. Some linking is also not quite logical: “On the other hand” suggests a contrast, although the paragraph simply moves to another nutrient. The overview’s repeated “In US people…” phrasing also makes the flow less smooth. Use more varied, purposeful links and connect comparisons across categories to create a more developed progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic vocabulary to describe the chart, including “sodium,” “saturated fats,” “proportion” and “comprises.” The meaning is generally understandable, but several choices are unnatural or imprecise for describing chart data. “Injurious to health” is overly formal, while “a very high in sodium dinner” is not a natural collocation. Repeated use of “contains” and “present” also limits flexibility, and “unhealthy ingredient” does not accurately describe the comparison being made. Aim for precise reporting language such as “accounts for,” “makes up” and “the highest proportion,” while keeping collocations natural. This would improve clarity and range without making the description unnecessarily elaborate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of sentence forms, including clauses joined with “while,” and most of the data remains understandable. However, errors in agreement, articles, sentence construction and punctuation are noticeable. For example, “The pie charts illustrates” has a subject–verb agreement error, and “Breakfast and snacks both contains” should use a plural verb. The overview begins “Overall, In US,” with incorrect capitalisation and missing article use; “In US people consume a very high in sodium dinner” is also structurally faulty. These issues make some sentences awkward even though the intended meaning can usually be recovered. Check subject–verb agreement and article use, and build each sentence around a clear subject and verb before adding comparisons.

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