Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Average percentage of sodium, saturated fats and addded sugar in typical meals consumed in the USA.
There are three type of nutrient chart given below they show the average percentage of meals that are unhealithy if eaten too much in daily .
Firstly we start sodium. In breakfast have 14per sodium in meal there are comparetively less then others like sturated fat and added sugar. saturated fat and sugar have 16per sodium.
In dinner if we compare sodium, saturated fat and added sugar. sodium is more unhealthy than other sodium has 43percent in dinner that are unhealthy for human life.
In lunch sodium has 29percent they are maximum in other saturated fat has 26percent and added sugar is 19percent so prove that sugar is less in lunch comparetively others
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
The response identifies several relevant figures, including sodium at 43% for dinner and the lunch values of 29% sodium, 26% saturated fat and 19% added sugar. However, it does not provide a clear overview of the main patterns across all three nutrients, and it omits the important finding that snacks account for the highest share of added sugar (42%). The breakfast comparison is also confused: 14% applies to sodium, while saturated fat and added sugar are each 16%, not “16per sodium.” Some descriptions, such as calling sodium “more unhealthy,” do not accurately explain what the percentages represent. The response is 129 words, below the required 150, and needs fuller, more accurate coverage of the chart.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has a basic sequence, moving from breakfast to dinner and then lunch, and signposting such as “Firstly” and “In lunch” helps the reader follow the intended comparisons. However, there is no clear introduction beyond repeating the chart title, and the paragraphs do not build towards an overall summary. The repeated focus on individual meals leaves the main patterns difficult to see, especially because snacks are not discussed. Some linking is awkward or unclear, as in “In dinner if we compare…” and “so prove that sugar is less in lunch comparetively others.” Grouping the figures by key trends and using clearer comparison links would create stronger progression.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “average percentage,” “compare” and nutrient names, so the reader can generally identify the subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear. For example, “more unhealthy” does not precisely describe a larger percentage, and “16per sodium” confuses the nutrient being measured. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “addded,” “unhealithy,” “sturated” and “comparentively.” Use accurate terms such as “share,” “proportion” and “account for,” and check spelling and collocations. This would make the comparisons more precise and easier to understand.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response mainly uses short, simple statements and attempts some longer comparisons, but these longer structures are often faulty. Examples include “There are three type of nutrient chart given below” and “In breakfast have 14per sodium in meal,” where sentence structure, agreement and articles are not controlled. The sentence beginning “In dinner if we compare…” is incomplete as written, while “sodium has 43percent in dinner that are unhealthy” has unclear clause structure and agreement. These errors sometimes make the intended relationships difficult to follow. Practise complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, for example, “At dinner, sodium accounts for 43% of the total,” and use simple comparison structures accurately before adding more complex clauses.
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