Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The charts above shows the percentage of

three different nutrients consumed in United states of America.

Overall, the rate in which sodium is consumed at dinner exceeds that of saturated fats and added sugar which accounted for 43%,37% and 23% respectively.

A significant number of persons ate snacks riched in added sugar than the ones that has

alot of sodium or saturated fats in the content

each holding a percentage of 42%,14%, and 21% sequenlly.

Furthermore, At lunch the Americans that consumed diets containing added sugar accounted for 19%, whereas 26% of the population preferred food made of saturated fats for lunch, also sodium has the highest percentage of consumption at lunch with the percent of 29%.

To sumup, average percent of the population consumed same quantity of food rich in saturated fats and added sugar which for accounted for 16% then only 14% of the residents of USA consumed sodium riched food for breakfast.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify several important patterns and report many figures accurately: dinner has the highest shares of sodium (43%) and saturated fat (37%), while snacks lead in added sugar (42%). You also compare the three nutrients at lunch and note the breakfast figures. This gives the response relevant coverage of the charts. However, the overview is not fully clear: saying sodium at dinner “exceeds” the other nutrients is accurate, but it would be more useful to summarise the contrasting peak for added sugar in snacks. Some comparisons are also imprecise, such as “a significant number of persons,” which describes people rather than the percentages shown. A clearer overview and more precise reporting of the main contrasts would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction to an overview and then to meal-specific details. Paragraphing helps separate these functions, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Furthermore,” and “To sumup” signal progression. However, the sequence of comparisons is not always easy to follow: the second body paragraph combines snacks with three figures, while the next shifts to lunch and the final paragraph returns to breakfast. Some references, including “the ones” and “which,” are unclear, and the conclusion repeats information rather than bringing the main patterns together. Organising the details by the most notable meal for each nutrient, and using clearer references, would make the progression more coherent.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “percentage,” “consumed,” “accounted for,” and “exceeds,” and you attempt to vary your phrasing. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing chart data. “Persons ate snacks riched in added sugar” is awkward, and “food made of saturated fats” does not express the intended idea naturally. There are also spelling errors such as “sequenlly” and “sumup,” alongside informal forms such as “alot.” These choices sometimes make the comparisons less precise, although the general meaning remains understandable. Aim for standard collocations such as “the proportion of calories from” or “the figure for,” and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including a relative clause in “which accounted for 43%, 37% and 23% respectively” and a contrast in the lunch comparison. However, some errors in sentence structure and agreement reduce accuracy. The opening “The charts above shows” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “the ones that has” also mismatches subject and verb. The sentence beginning “A significant number…” is incomplete or poorly connected to the following phrase, and the final sentence has an unclear structure around “which for accounted for.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, particularly after “Furthermore” and in the closing paragraph. Use shorter, complete sentences when reporting several figures, then check agreement and clause structure.

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