Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The givenn pie chart compare the proportion of sodium, saturated fat and added sugar used in four types of meals like dinner, lunch, snacks and breakfast consumed in USA.
Overall, sodium is the largest consumer in one out of three forr dinner, while added sugar shows a better in snaks and saturated fat accounting is the smallest proportion in most meals. The highest percentage of sodium use seen in dinner at (43%) while added sugar recods the greatest use in for snaks.
In sodium, dinner is by far the highest consumer at (43%) and in lunch is relatively a better used with (29%). While, snaks and breakfast is almost reamin equal amounts at (14%). However, saturated fat shows a simlar pattern, dinner is dominting at (37%), followed by luch with (26%). And snaks and breakfast uses are much lower at (21%) and (16%), respectively. Added sugar stand out of its high reliance consume in snacks at (42%), with (23%0 for dinner, while lunch and breakfast are much lower with (16%) and (19%).
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
You cover all three nutrients and compare the four meal types, with several accurate key figures: dinner is highest for sodium (43%) and saturated fat (37%), while snacks lead for added sugar (42%). This gives the response a relevant overview and supports the main comparisons. However, the overview is partly unclear: “sodium is the largest consumer in one out of three for dinner” does not clearly express the chart’s pattern, and “saturated fat accounting is the smallest proportion in most meals” is not accurate, since it is not the smallest category in every meal. There is also a data error: breakfast and lunch added sugar are reversed; the chart shows 16% and 19%, respectively. Make the overview more precise and check each figure against the chart.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview and a paragraph comparing the data. Grouping the figures by nutrient also makes the information easy to locate. However, progression within sentences is sometimes awkward or unclear. For example, “While, saturated fat shows a similar pattern” is not a complete, smoothly connected transition, and the repeated use of “while” and “and” makes some comparisons feel mechanically joined. The overview also repeats the dinner and snack highs rather than clearly summarising the overall contrast. Use complete comparison sentences and organise the body so that related patterns are linked explicitly; this would make the progression more consistent and the relationships between figures clearer.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “percentage,” “highest,” and “followed by,” so the reader can generally identify the comparisons you intend. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or repetitive, as in “largest consumer,” “a better used,” “high reliance consume,” and “uses are much lower.” These expressions make some points difficult to interpret. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “givenn,” “snaks,” “recods,” “simlar,” and “dominting.” Aim for precise reporting language such as “accounted for,” “was highest,” and “made up,” and proofread spelling carefully. A broader set of accurate comparison verbs would improve clarity and flexibility.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple and more complex comparisons, including clauses beginning with “while” and “followed by,” but control is inconsistent. Some sentence patterns are incomplete or incorrectly joined: “While, saturated fat shows a similar pattern, dinner is dominating…” begins with a dependent linker and then runs into another clause, while “In sodium, dinner is by far the highest consumer” uses an awkward grammatical frame. Agreement and verb forms also need attention, as in “snacks and breakfast uses” and “added sugar stand out.” Use complete clauses with clear subjects and verbs, and check singular/plural agreement. More accurate sentence construction would allow your comparisons to be expressed without the reader having to infer the intended relationships.
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