Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is often argued, that it is best to accept unknown circumstances like unsatisfactory job, as well as shortage of the money. while other believes that it is compulsory for us to try in these situations and improve these times. In my opinion, to accept bad conditions in our life it will teach us more things.

On the one hand, there are several benefits to accept bad situations and learn from them, Firstly, it teaches it teaches you that how to save money for the future and how we can stay independently mostly in the life of teenagers in that time it is a best time in the entire life to save money for the unsatisfactory challenges.Furthermore how to be independent as well as less hope from the other individuals. For instance, if somone he does not independ so he would spent money without any stress if we compare to those who do not have enogh for the require of the life.

On the other hand, if we are staying in the same situation as we are so would often reached to the wealthy life. In addition, those who are think that it is good to enhance these situations we need more effort for this and more creativity as well as to divide our time into two times in our daily life work more than we are expecting for boosting our wealth.

I n conclusion, In my perspective, bad situations teach us how to manage money as well as how we use it wisely for the things that we are want. Although is is often best to improve the life on that we are living.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views and state a personal position, especially in the opening and conclusion, where you favour learning from difficult circumstances while acknowledging that improvement may be worthwhile. However, the discussion is only partial: the benefits of acceptance receive most of the attention, while the case for actively improving a situation is brief and not clearly explained. The claim that remaining in the same situation could lead to a “wealthy life” is difficult to follow and is not supported with a clear reason or example. Develop each view with a distinct explanation and relevant support, then make your final position consistent and unambiguous; the conclusion currently says improvement is often best after arguing that acceptance teaches useful lessons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, separate paragraphs beginning “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion, so the reader can identify the intended structure. However, progression within paragraphs is weak: the first body paragraph moves from saving money to independence and then to an unclear example, without showing how these points connect. Linking expressions such as “Furthermore” and “In addition” are used, but they do not always establish a clear relationship between ideas, and some transitions feel mechanical. Improve the sequence by giving each paragraph one central claim, explaining it, and then adding a directly relevant example. Clearer references and a conclusion that follows from the discussion would also make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “unsatisfactory,” “independently,” “creativity,” and “manage money,” and you attempt to discuss financial hardship and personal development. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or unnatural expressions make ideas harder to understand, such as “unknown circumstances,” “shortage of the money,” “enhance these situations,” and “boosting our wealth.” Spelling errors such as “somone” and “enogh” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. For example, distinguish between accepting a difficult situation and improving it, using phrases such as “cope with financial hardship” and “take steps to improve one’s circumstances.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt longer sentences and use some subordinate clauses, for example “if we compare to those who do not have…” and “Although…” in the conclusion. However, complex structures are often faulty, and frequent errors sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “other believes,” “it teaches it teaches you,” “if somone he does not independ,” and “those who are think.” There are also problems with articles, verb forms, agreement, and sentence boundaries, including the lowercase “while” after a full stop and the run-on construction in the first body paragraph. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses; proofread for subject–verb agreement and complete sentence structure.

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