Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

there are two types of poeple in this world, who come with two different kinds of views and thought prcesses. one believe that situations and condition can't be changed and it is better for us to accept things as it is. they think we can't do anything and thus things should be just accepted as it is. so, they don't do anything to change their situation not because they don't have power to do things but because of their believes that it would be in their interest to accept things as it is.

then there is this second group who thinks that we shouldn't just accept situations as fate and don't lose hope, we should try to change situations for better conditions. these are the people who believe in efforts and that their efforts can bring about a change for them. these also have believe in fate but their will to change situations doesn't lets them sit idle and accept things as fate.

but in my opinion both are somewhat correct as their are circumstances in which you can't do anything other than accepting fate but it is also not right to just loose hope and do anything. for better conditions we should work hard with a belief that our efforts will bear a fruitfull result for us as, it is the only way to change situations. the one who works hard with a hope in his heart always succeds no matter if fate is in his side or not.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses both views: it explains that some people accept circumstances as unchangeable, while others believe effort can improve them. Your own position is also present: you say both views have some validity, but that people should generally work hard and retain hope. However, the discussion remains broad and largely repeats these claims rather than developing them with a specific example or explanation. The first view is described mainly as a belief in fate, and the second as belief in effort, so the practical reasons behind each position are not explored. The conclusion also introduces the idea that effort succeeds regardless of fate without showing how this qualifies your earlier point. Develop each view with a concrete situation and make your final position more precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: one paragraph presents the acceptance view, another presents the improvement view, and a final paragraph gives your opinion. This makes the main line of discussion easy to identify. Within paragraphs, however, ideas are often linked by repeated forms such as “as it is,” “situations,” and “fate,” which makes the progression feel circular. Connectors such as “then” and “but” help signal movement, though the relationships between some claims could be clearer. For example, explain how accepting unavoidable circumstances can coexist with trying to improve changeable ones. Use clearer topic sentences and develop each paragraph from its main claim to a reason and example; this would make the organisation more purposeful.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “accept,” “efforts,” “change,” “fate,” and “conditions,” so the central ideas can be understood. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases recur frequently, particularly “situations,” “accept,” and “fate.” Some choices are imprecise or unnatural, such as “change situations for better conditions,” “their efforts will bear a fruitfull result,” and “fate is in his side.” Spelling errors, including “poeple,” “prcesses,” “believes,” and “succeds,” also reduce accuracy. Build a wider set of precise expressions for discussing circumstances, agency, and outcomes, and check spelling and collocations carefully. More varied, natural phrasing would make the argument clearer and more convincing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and subordinate clauses, for example, “there are circumstances in which you can't do anything other than accepting fate,” showing an effort to express qualification and contrast. However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty. Examples include “one believe” and “these also have believe,” where subject–verb agreement and verb patterns are incorrect, and “their will to change situations doesn't lets them sit idle,” where the verb after “doesn't” is not in the correct form. There are also problems with articles and sentence boundaries, including the opening run-on structure. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “although,” “because,” or “while.” Review agreement, verb forms, and punctuation when editing.

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