Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is argued that every bad situation should be taken normally such as discomfort job and lacking of money but others believe that people should be try to enhance from such situations.I believe that both views make sense and my opinion will give on below.

On the one hand,it is very normal that life has ups and down and some times people have no chance to deal with such situations.If people take more panic with their unsatisfactory job then they will not happy on their professional and daily lives.Moreover,though money is more vital in daily lives but it should be accept for their happiness.

On the other hand,it is the best solution that people have to try more and more to improve their position and earning enough money to live a standered and secure life.Everyone has the same problem in the world on their jobs and money and only by hard work hard they can change their positon in a welknown company that more suitable and earn enough.

To sum up,though the problerm of unsatisfactory job or shortage of money is a necessary problem so its should be take normally is a brilliant decission and try how to overcome from these typs of bad situations and try until success.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both sides of the question: the first body paragraph explains why people may accept difficult circumstances, while the second argues for trying to improve work and income. Your own position is present in the introduction and conclusion, but it is not fully clear: “both views make sense” is not developed into a definite judgement about when acceptance or action is preferable. The supporting ideas are also limited—for example, the point that worry can harm daily life is not explained with a specific reason or example, and the second view relies mainly on hard work. The response is 41 words below the required minimum, which leaves little space to develop the discussion. Clarify your position and extend each view with relevant explanation or an example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. The signposts “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “To sum up” help readers identify the stages of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is limited, and some links between ideas are unclear. For instance, “Moreover, though money is more vital… but it should be accept for their happiness” does not clearly connect the importance of money with accepting a shortage. The conclusion also combines several ideas without showing their relationship. Develop a clearer sequence in each paragraph—state a point, explain it, and then illustrate it—and use linking words only where the logical connection is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “unsatisfactory job,” “shortage of money,” “improve,” and “secure life,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “taken normally,” “discomfort job,” “earning enough money to live a standered,” and “overcome from these typs.” Spelling errors such as “positon,” “welknown,” and “decission” also reduce accuracy. Build a more reliable set of phrases for discussing acceptance, financial hardship, and career improvement, and check spelling and word forms. Prefer natural combinations such as “accept a difficult situation” and “improve one’s financial circumstances.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a conditional structure in “If people take more panic… then they will not happy” and a concessive clause beginning “though.” However, complex attempts are often faulty, and frequent errors affect clarity. For example, “people should be try” has an incorrect verb form, “they will not happy” is missing a linking verb, and “it should be accept” uses the wrong passive form. There are also problems with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, as in “life has ups and down” and the run-on opening sentence. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then build longer sentences with one clear main clause and a correctly formed subordinate clause. Review verb forms, articles, plurals, and punctuation.

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