Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Many people think that it is significant to accept the unnecessary issue, like lack of money and not satisfy with your job. Other believe that rather than believing to accept bad situation we should give our best to improve the situation. In my perspective, we should not be backed by harsh situation if occured in life instead this we need to tackle the situation by the courage and faith to succeed in the later life.

On the one hand, people thought that the only way is to face consequences instead of doing struggle to solve or tackle situation. So in this case, individuals do not even achieve their desire goals but they remain same. These people must plan to take their self out of bad situation and achieve their life objectives rather than facing issues of shortage of money and have guilt of unsatisfactory job. For example, in Pakistan people doing jobs in government institutions don't even focus on their abilities but they only need is to have a balanced life, so these people struggle in the life.

On the other hand, individuals believe that it is better to try and improve such situation instead accepting the situation. People must have courage to give their best in unsecessary situation althought, they are motivated enough to put their self out of situation. They believe in their self and have faith to tackle the situation. For instance, in COVID-19 old age people died enough but people who survive they strengthen their self.

In conclusion, instead of accepting any bad situation we should be able to tackle the situation and improve such situations to achieve your desied goals in future life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You present both views and give a clear preference in the introduction and conclusion: you argue that people should try to improve difficult circumstances. However, the discussion is only partially developed. The first body paragraph is confusing because it initially describes accepting consequences, then says people should plan to escape the situation; this makes the view being discussed unclear. The examples about government employees and older people during COVID-19 do not clearly explain how they support the respective arguments. Develop each side with a specific reason and a relevant example, and make your position consistent throughout. The response meets the required length; the nine words copied from the task prompt were excluded from the count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion. This gives the reader some organisation. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear, particularly in the first body paragraph, where the discussion shifts from accepting consequences to planning to leave a bad situation. Linking phrases such as “So in this case” and “For example” do not always make the relationship between claims and examples clear, and “instead of” ideas are repeated. Use topic sentences that identify each view, then arrange explanation and evidence in a clear sequence. Ensure pronouns such as “these people” have an unmistakable reference.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “shortage of money,” “unsatisfactory job,” “courage,” and “faith,” and you attempt to express abstract ideas about coping with hardship. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making meaning difficult to follow. For example, “accept the unnecessary issue,” “give our best in unnecessary situation,” and “strengthen their self” do not express the intended ideas naturally. There are also spelling and word-form errors, including “unsecessary” and “desied.” Build a more precise set of phrases for discussing hardship and improvement, and check spelling and collocations. For instance, use “difficult circumstances” and “make an effort to improve one’s situation.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the response includes some subordinate clauses, such as “rather than believing to accept bad situation we should give our best to improve the situation.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and frequent errors can make the argument difficult to understand. Examples include “Other believe,” “if occured in life,” “instead this we need,” and “individuals believe that it is better to try and improve such situation instead accepting the situation.” These show problems with agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction. There are also unclear or incomplete constructions, such as “but they only need is to have a balanced life.” Practise building accurate sentences with one main idea, then add subordinate clauses only when their grammar is secure.

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