Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This is an ongoing debate many individuals thought that it is better to accept a worse situation in life but other argued that it was best to try and change situation.

Numerous citizens believe that this is the best approach to live in a bad situation like unisatisfactory jon and shortage of money. For example, live in that condition is hard for everyone if the person have no other way like jobless for many years moreover, if the individual get the high paying money but the evironment is not good. In addition, some people wants the peaceful environment but the income is not good but they prefer peace instead of money.

On the other hand, many citizens believe that do not live in bad situation you should keep trying for high paying job or anything you want to achieve in life and improve your condition. For example, if the person do not want low salary they should apply for other work keep trying until they get the desire workplace. However, in the life no one born with lots of money or good environment if they faced such kind of situations they work hard for this and gain thier goal and live a quality life they want.

From my perspective, the second point is best for everyone because you should try and improve bad situation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views and state your opinion clearly at the end: you favour trying to improve a bad situation. The examples about choosing peace over income and applying for better-paid work are relevant. However, the discussion is only partial because the reasons behind accepting a difficult situation are not clearly explained, and the second view is supported mainly by general claims such as working hard to achieve a goal. The response also does not meet the stated minimum length, which limits the opportunity to develop and support the ideas. Explain why someone might reasonably accept a situation, then develop each side with a specific example and a clearer link to your opinion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a concluding opinion. Phrases such as “On the other hand” and “From my perspective” help signal the direction of the argument. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, particularly in the first body paragraph, where the examples about joblessness, income and a peaceful environment are not clearly connected. Some linking is mechanical, and “moreover” does not make the relationship between the ideas clear. Use topic sentences that state each paragraph’s main reason, and connect each example explicitly to that reason. Clearer referencing and a more developed conclusion would also strengthen the overall flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “shortage of money,” “high paying job,” “salary” and “quality life.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning harder to understand. Examples include “live in a bad situation,” “desire workplace” and “gain their goal”; more natural phrasing would be “remain in difficult circumstances,” “preferred workplace” and “achieve their goals.” Spelling errors such as “unisatisfactory,” “evironment” and “thier” are also noticeable. Build a wider set of accurate expressions for employment, financial hardship and personal priorities, and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including conditional ideas such as “if the person do not want low salary they should apply for other work.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence boundaries occur frequently enough to make some passages difficult to follow. For example, “many individuals thought” does not fit the present-time argument, while “the person have” and “some people wants” show subject–verb agreement problems. The opening also joins two complete ideas without appropriate punctuation. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly controlled subordinate clause, then check tense consistency, agreement and punctuation before submitting.

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