Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some people argue that it is right to accept a bad situation, such as unsatisfactory job or shortage of money while others agree with that fact to try and enhance these situations.

The first view is about being acceptable with breakdowns and a lack of fundings. From my believable this argument is not true because every one should work hardly to improve his life, not to be in the same place for the whole life. So this perspective did not right to many people who do not have high financial rewards. In my opinion, every person who accept bad situation does not have career aspirations so he will be an unsuccessful citizen in the future.

The second argument is: it is more effective to try enhancing such bad situations to exchange them with healthier ones. Person who work hard to increase his abilities in the weakness points that he have should make his dailylife easier, also his family's ones. From my position, I can call every one who deserve in this way a fruitful citizen to the whole community not only to his family. Being able to restart your career and improve your capabilities is a crucial gift that god gave to any one.

For my viewpoint, the second view is better in order to the facts that we consider above. Any worker should put the majority of his efforts to risse his productivity, so in this way he might find high incoming opportuinities.

In conclusion, there are two opinions about how you can treated with substandard situations. You can either be a quitter or a warrior fighting for superior life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and state a clear preference for trying to improve difficult circumstances, especially in “the second view is better.” The discussion is relevant, but the two positions are not explored evenly: the reasons someone might accept a bad job or financial hardship are barely explained, while the argument for striving is mostly general claims about career aspirations, productivity, and helping one’s family. Some claims, such as calling people who accept their situation “unsuccessful citizens,” are too absolute and are not supported. To develop the response further, explain when acceptance might be sensible—for example, when change is not immediately possible—and support each view with a specific, realistic example. Keep your opinion clear while making the discussion more balanced and developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, a paragraph stating your preference, and a conclusion. This helps the reader follow the broad direction of the essay. However, progression within paragraphs is limited, and several links are awkward or unclear, such as “From my believable” and “in order to the facts that we consider above.” The conclusion’s contrast between “a quitter or a warrior” repeats the position rather than drawing together the discussion, and the opening sentence does not clearly distinguish the two sides. Use straightforward transitions to show how each reason supports a view, and make references explicit. Developing each paragraph around one main point, followed by an explanation or example, would create clearer progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to work and personal improvement, including “career aspirations,” “financial rewards,” “capabilities,” and “productivity.” These choices show an effort to discuss the topic beyond very basic terms. However, the range is limited by repeated general wording and frequent inaccurate or unnatural combinations, which sometimes make the meaning difficult to interpret. Examples include “a lack of fundings,” “enhance these situations,” “high incoming opportuinities,” and “fruitful citizen.” Spelling errors such as “opportuinities” and “risse” also reduce accuracy. Aim for natural collocations and check word forms: for instance, use “financial difficulties,” “improve these circumstances,” and “better-paid opportunities.” More precise vocabulary would make your arguments clearer and more convincing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a relative clause in “Person who work hard to increase his abilities…” and a conditional idea in “he might find…” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. For example, “every person who accept” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “how you can treated” has an incorrect verb form. Articles and sentence construction also need attention, as in “such as unsatisfactory job” and “The second argument is: it is more effective…” Practise building accurate sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement, articles, and verb forms before adding extra clauses. Greater control of these basics will make your ideas easier to understand.

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