Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-10
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Many individuals think that accepting the unnecessary situation is good while others argue that its better to work hard and change bad situation into good ones.I think the better opion is o ry hard and make the worse situation into better .
The accepting of bad situation is caused because of the illnes of the people.
They think it is their fate and they dont want to change ot and they lived in this situation.If they accept the lower salary jobs, it will be hard for them to survive in this world by using less money.Moreover,if they need a job and they accept it while their intrest is not in this job then they make big mistakes.For instance, if the engineer join the farmer feild they surely make mistakes.
However, it is better to work hard and make more chances in our own life raher than accepting the bad jobs.So people need to work hard and overcome from every obstacle of the bad situation.They need to improve their abilities and search for the jobs in which they are intrested.Then they make more money and their life is better.For instance, my brothers chose to work hard in electronic field and they find a jb of their calliber and now he make more money than before.
in conclusion,half of the people believe that its better to accept the worse situation and other think they need to work hard and make it better for themselves.I think its better to make worse situation into good one by choosing realatable field and make more money
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You discuss both responses to difficult circumstances and state your preference for trying to improve them, so the main task is addressed. The paragraph about acceptance gives relevant points, including financial difficulty and taking work that does not match one’s interests; the second view is supported by the example of your brothers finding better-paid work. However, the discussion remains limited and some reasoning is unclear. The opening claim that acceptance is caused by “the illness of the people” is not explained, and the engineer/farmer example does not clearly show why accepting a situation is harmful. Your opinion is present, but it would be stronger if you explained why effort is generally preferable while acknowledging when acceptance may be necessary.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion, which gives it some basic organisation. “However” signals the move to the opposing view, and “For instance” introduces examples. Nevertheless, the overall progression is not consistently clear: the first body paragraph moves from illness and fate to salary and job suitability without explaining the links, while the conclusion largely repeats the introduction. Several sentences are joined together or run on, making relationships between ideas harder to follow. Use one clear topic sentence per paragraph, develop each point in a logical order, and use referencing such as “this approach” to avoid repeating the same wording.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “obstacle,” “abilities,” “salary,” and “interested,” and the reader can generally identify your main ideas. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making meaning unclear. For example, “accepting the unnecessary situation” does not express the task’s idea of accepting a bad situation, and “make more chances in our own life” is not a natural way to describe improving one’s prospects. Spelling errors such as “opion,” “intrest,” and “caliber” also reduce accuracy. Build a bank of precise phrases for discussing employment, financial hardship, and personal agency, and check spelling carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt some longer sentences using “while,” “if,” and “because,” as well as simpler statements, but control is inconsistent. Errors occur frequently in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation. For example, “they lived in this situation” shifts tense unnecessarily, and “now he make more money” has incorrect subject–verb agreement. The opening also contains a run-on sentence, while “if the engineer join the farmer field” lacks appropriate article and verb forms. These errors sometimes make the intended relationships difficult to follow. Practise writing shorter, accurate sentences first, then combine ideas with subordinate clauses; also check tense consistency, singular/plural agreement, and sentence boundaries.
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