Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Many people believe that it is best to accept a bad situtation, such as unsatisfactory job or shortage of money but others argue that it is better to try to improve such situations. And i think i agree with the opinion says it is better to try and improve these type of situations.

In life, not everything will go according to the plan, there will be hard times too. And many people give up on that and accept their fate. They believe that it is not meant for them and if anything is not meant for you, whatever you do, you will not get that thing. So they just give up and accept the situation. Hardships like unsatisfactory job and shortage money are very common problem in a middle-class person's life and this is where they give up and accept the fact that they can not change what is happening with them right now. They find themselves in a very difficult situations and find no way to get out of that. So, they accept the situation.

But giving up should not be an option. There will be hard times, there will be bad situations, that is how life works and people need to be more strong, specially in those moments where every way fades away. Some people overcome hardships by not giving up. They try to improve their situation, work harder and earn more. And by holding on to, they improve the bad situations.

So i think, giving upn should not be an option. If we do not give up in bad situtation , we can overcome the bad phase.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You present a clear preference for improving difficult circumstances, and you refer to both accepting hardship and trying to change it. However, the discussion of the first view is mostly a general explanation that people “accept their fate”; it does not explore why acceptance might be sensible, such as when a situation cannot be changed or when acceptance protects wellbeing. The case for improvement is also asserted rather than developed: “work harder and earn more” is a broad claim without a specific example or explanation of possible limits. Your opinion is repeated in the introduction and conclusion, but it would be stronger if supported throughout with balanced, developed reasoning.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph about accepting hardship, a paragraph supporting change, and a conclusion. This gives the reader a basic sense of the two views. However, progression within paragraphs is repetitive: the first body paragraph repeatedly says people give up and accept the situation, while the final paragraph restates that giving up is not an option. Some links are awkward or overused, including repeated “And” at sentence openings and “So” to introduce conclusions. Organise each body paragraph around one main reason, then explain and illustrate it; use clearer transitions to distinguish the opposing view from your own.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “hard times,” “hardships,” “overcome,” and “improve their situation,” so the main ideas are generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repeated, particularly “bad situation,” “give up,” and “accept the situation.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice problems, such as “situtation,” “giving upn,” and “shortage money,” which can distract the reader. Some phrases are imprecise or unnatural, for example “every way fades away” and “holding on to” without a clear object. Build a wider set of accurate expressions for coping, changing circumstances, and weighing the benefits of acceptance.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and subordinate clauses, such as “They believe that it is not meant for them and if anything is not meant for you…,” but control is inconsistent. Errors occur in sentence boundaries, agreement, articles, and sentence construction: “And i think i agree with the opinion says” lacks a grammatical link, “very common problem” needs plural agreement or an article, and “a very difficult situations” mismatches article and number. Several sentences begin with “And,” and punctuation around clauses is often weak. These frequent errors sometimes make the reader pause, although the overall meaning can usually be followed. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add complex clauses with correct agreement and punctuation.

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