Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

few individual believe that people should accept a bad situation in your life like shortage of money and unsatisfied from the job but other people argue that it is better to try and improve your situation . I believe that they have to regain their confidence so that they can able to improve the circumstances in their life instead of stuck in bad situation.

firstly, some people accept the bad situation like financial crisis and unsatisfied job because of stressful life ,lack of education and financial problem, for instance, some people are not well educated and their family background is financial unstable.Secondly, they losse their confidence and skills to start something new to make their life better.

On the other hand ,according to me they have to regain the confidence to start something new to improve their lifestyle and to be financially stable. for example,they need to know that which skills they have so that they can use it it make their good life. In addition,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You give a relevant opinion: you argue that people should rebuild their confidence and try to improve their circumstances. You also mention reasons some people accept hardship, including financial instability, limited education and stress. However, the discussion of the two views is very brief, and the first view is not explored beyond a few possible causes; the example about family background is also not explained. The response ends mid-sentence after “In addition,” so the argument and conclusion are missing. The response contains 157 words, which is 93 words below the required minimum; the nine words copied from the prompt are not counted. Develop both sides with specific explanations and examples, then state your opinion clearly in a concluding paragraph.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening paragraph introduces the issue, “firstly” and “secondly” introduce reasons for accepting hardship, and “On the other hand” signals the contrasting view. These markers help readers recognise the intended structure. However, the progression is incomplete: the response stops at “In addition,” and there is no conclusion. Some links between ideas are unclear, and the second paragraph combines several causes without showing how they connect. The phrase “for example” introduces a point, but the explanation that follows is difficult to track. Use complete paragraphs for each view, connect each example directly to its claim, and finish with a concise summary of your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “financial crisis,” “confidence,” “skills,” and “financially stable,” so the reader can identify the main subject. There is also an attempt to vary wording with phrases such as “bad situation” and “improve your lifestyle.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate or unnatural, including “unsatisfied from the job,” “financial unstable,” and “loose their confidence.” Repetition of “situation,” “life,” and “improve” also limits precision. Build a wider set of accurate phrases for employment and financial hardship, and check spelling and collocations. More precise vocabulary would make your ideas clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences, for example, “I believe that they have to regain their confidence so that they can able to improve the circumstances,” and use basic connectors to join ideas. This shows an effort to express reasons and results, but the sentence patterns are limited and errors occur frequently enough to make parts difficult to follow. Examples include “few individual believe,” “people should accept … in your life,” and “they can able to improve”; these involve agreement, pronoun consistency and verb construction. Punctuation and spacing are also inconsistent, particularly around commas and sentence openings. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses, checking subject–verb agreement, articles and verb forms.

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