Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some individuals think that it is great to accept a worst situation, such as unsatisfactory job or shortage of income.Others claim that it is better to enhance the things which go bad such situation.In my perspective both states are life lessons.

Most of the people not success in their early lives because they have to face some struggles, failures and also betrayals from others.These challanges they need to face.Morever, they need to wait for the right period to successfull person in their life.Untill they have to accept the worst situation in their lives.For example a lower class young boy wants to become a cricket for his country.He does not have much amount to spend for his cricket career ,eventhough he performs very well and he has more skills in that sport.Therefore, he has to quick his cricket dream due to shortage of money for his dream to continue in serious way.

On the one other hand, many failures are becoming better understand of mistakes they have done in their past lives.These will make them better version of them compared to past.For an instance, a software developer shifts to cyber security job eventhough he works very responsible and well.These make his very good in his profession.Whereas, he wants to earn more and also enhance his skills into high he must change his field from software developer into cyber security.Perhaps, it takes a long time that employee has to wait for the right situation.

In general, dreamers need patience to acheieve their targets and dream goals with right mindset.Additionally, they have to manifestation in their daily lives,This make them successfull person in their future.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views: the first body paragraph presents accepting hardship, while the next discusses changing careers to improve one’s prospects. Your examples—a young cricketer who cannot afford to continue and a software developer moving into cybersecurity—are relevant. However, the discussion remains limited and does not fully explain when acceptance is sensible versus when taking action is preferable. The opening says “both states are life lessons,” but this does not clearly establish your own position on which approach is better or how you weigh the two views. The conclusion focuses on patience and goals rather than directly answering the question. State your opinion clearly in the introduction, develop the reasoning behind it, and return to that position in the conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Examples are placed alongside the relevant arguments, which helps the reader follow the broad topic. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the cricket example moves from financial difficulty to abandoning the dream without explaining how this supports acceptance as a general approach. Linking phrases such as “On the one other hand,” “Therefore,” and “Whereas” are sometimes awkward or do not show the intended relationship between ideas. The final paragraph also introduces “manifestation” without connecting it clearly to the discussion. Use simpler, accurate transitions and make each paragraph’s main point explicit before developing its example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “shortage of income,” “struggles,” “betrayals,” “cyber security,” and “enhance his skills.” These choices show an effort to discuss hardship, career change, and personal development. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning difficult to interpret. For example, “accept a worst situation,” “quick his cricket dream,” and “manifestation in their daily lives” do not express the intended ideas naturally. There are also spelling and word-form errors, such as “challanges,” “successfull,” and “acheieve.” Build a bank of topic-specific collocations and check spelling and word forms; prefer precise, familiar expressions over ambitious but unclear wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “because,” “even though,” and “whereas.” This gives the response some structural variety. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in sentence formation, verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation can make the reader work to understand the message. For instance, “Most of the people not success in their early lives” lacks a correctly formed verb, while “These make his very good in his profession” has unclear agreement and sentence structure. Several sentences also run together or have misplaced punctuation, as in the opening paragraph. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time. Proofread for complete sentences, verb forms, and punctuation.

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