Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some individuals believe that the best option when they experience hard situations is accepting. While other argue that developing situations would be better. In my view, people can accept their

-Some individuals allow themselves to accept a bad situation.

-When they believe their lives should be better, expectation create a consider amount of stress.

-They decide to accept these situation and change their perspectives.

-Being optimistic can provide happiness, leading to good mental healths.

-people in some regions suffer from poverty because of their national environment which creates hardship to live. Instead of thinking about how hard they have gone through, they accept this condition and look as it is normal things that everyone would undergo.

-On the other hand, some people argue that they should develop their situations for improving a quality of life.

-When people undergo hard situations, have to think carefully how to acquire better lives and gain more happiness.

-They develop their abilities and improve their skills.

-They become more resilient in handling with bad situations and they can overcome the problems which they might experience in the future.

-For example, some people undergo serious poverty. To avoid the suffering from lack of money, they find ways to improve these situations by learning new skills and finding second jobs. I believe that this action can bring them wealthy lives.

In conclustion, I believe that people should improve their abilities to get out of bad situations rather than accept their bad situations to relief stress.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views and state a preference for improving difficult circumstances, especially in the conclusion. The examples about poverty, developing skills, and taking a second job are relevant. However, the response only partially develops the discussion: the point that acceptance can reduce stress is asserted rather than explained, and the example of people normalising poverty does not show clearly when acceptance is beneficial or what its limits are. Your opening ends with “people can accept their” and does not establish a complete position, so your opinion is clearer only at the end. The response also falls two words short of the required minimum. Develop each view with a fuller explanation and make your position clear from the introduction.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, a section for each view, and a conclusion. The contrast marker “On the other hand” helps signal the shift to the second position, and the examples generally follow the ideas they illustrate. However, the dash-led notes make the body paragraphs feel like lists rather than connected discussion, and progression within each view is limited. Some links are unclear, such as “Instead of thinking about how hard they have gone through,” which does not connect smoothly to the claim about accepting poverty. The unfinished opening also disrupts the flow. Use complete paragraphs with topic sentences, then connect explanations and examples using clear references and transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “hard situations,” “perspectives,” “resilient,” and “poverty.” There are also attempts at more specific expressions such as “develop their abilities” and “quality of life.” However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or unnatural choices make parts of the response difficult to interpret. Examples include “developing situations,” “a consider amount of stress,” “mental healths,” and “bring them wealthy lives.” Spelling errors such as “conclustion” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise collocations and check word forms: for example, people can improve their circumstances, experience considerable stress, and achieve financial security.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a clause beginning “When they believe their lives should be better” and a sentence using “because.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to affect clarity. The opening contains an incomplete sentence (“While other argue…”) and ends with the unfinished phrase “people can accept their.” Other examples include missing subjects in “When people undergo hard situations, have to think carefully,” incorrect agreement in “expectation create,” and problems with articles and plurals in “these situation.” Review sentence completeness, subject–verb agreement, and singular/plural forms. Build accuracy with shorter complete sentences before adding more complex clauses.

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